I'm a 28 year old stay at home mother of two, ages 1 and 2. I love to write, and I love Harry Potter. Good combination.
I like it. The content is good, and that for me is everything. You do a great job of description. You might want to be careful about the story flow, at times it seems jumpy. Keep up the good work.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review allieb, I appreciate it very much. If you feel so motivated, could you provide me with a specific example of the flow issue? It would be useful to me so I know exactly what you mean as opposed to just in general. Thank you so much for the feedback.