Reviewer: Hitwizard
Date: 04/23/05 1:18
Chapter: The Uninvited Guests

10 out of 10.....really good fic! Plz post the next chapter quickly...and dont tell me that this will have Snape/Hermione elements (i just find the notion revolting!) excellent fic nevertheless...keep it up!

Author's Response: Glad you're enjoying it! Well, of course, it has Snape/Hermione elements, because she's working for him as an assistant, but that's it really. I wrote the story primarily as an adventure, not as a romance, because I'm tired of them. People are attracted to one another, but they're at war, and that comes first. And I will update soon. Thank you for your review!

Reviewer: QueenHal
Date: 04/22/05 1:58
Chapter: The Reading Room

Completely.... astounding. I, also, read the entire story (well, novel really) on the Red Hen site, and I cannot get over it. This has been the first fiction I've read that has explored Voldemort's plan so expertly. I won't be suprised if I'm actually let down by JKR's explanations for everything after reading Lilly's theory. I love what you did with Draco and Snape. Although I despise the characters in Cannon, I've found your portrayal of them to be entrancing, but still believable. I also must add that I loved the fact that Hermione had such a central roll, because, as others have said, it's easy to relate to her... and also refreshing getting to see the girl's side of things (with both Hermione and Lilly). I think that everything you did with the story was entirely interesting and well researched. Much of it got me really thinking. Thank you so much for a brilliant read.

Author's Response: Thank you for your thoughtful review. I'm so glad you saw and enjoyed the Red Hen version. I think we're all waiting anxiously to see what JKR comes up with. I had very mixed feelings about OOTP, and that's why I'm waiting for HBP to come out before I write anything new. And yes, I particularly wanted to do something with girls (and not the same old romances) because JKR doesn't seem to care about her female characters as much as the males. Yes, we have Hermione to identify with, but we really don't know all that much about her, and I hope that JKR explores more of her unpleasant traits (her arrogance, her social insensitivity, and her self-righteousness), to give her some moments of self-awareness and growth. And her female villains! Talk about cardboard characters! Snape is given a backstory, Voldemort is given a backstory, but Umbridge and Bellatrix are just bad, bad, bad and horrible. I'd like to see a story about Bellatrix being under Imperius all these years! Anyway, that's all in the future. Thanks so much for reading, and better yet, thinking while you read!

Reviewer: IJustReadThem
Date: 04/19/05 17:50
Chapter: The Uninvited Guests

WOW! I've been reading this over 3 days... great story! I can't wait for more... I love the descriptions of the castles and their (new) rooms... Great so far!!! More!

Author's Response: Glad you're enjoying it! Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Hermione2723
Date: 04/13/05 14:13
Chapter: The Slytherin Debate

Awesome chapter!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: elka78
Date: 04/11/05 8:26
Chapter: The Reading Room

I just read the story on Red Hen publications. It looks beautiful there, btw :) I really like how you developed the storyline and how everything falls into place and comes naturally as the story progresses. I find it a bit disconcerting that Snape in reality had a "crush" on Lily - being the pureblood and all. The tension withing Slytherin is shown nicely. It does feel like Lily is not just a 16 year old, but rather a much older and wiser - just looks like a 16yo. The amount of research that went into this work is unbelievable!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad you liked the PDF version. As to Snape--Lily is the only girl in canon we ever see being nice to Snape. We know he had an awful childhood and youth from his memories. He would have been horribly conflicted about her because of her background, but also fixated on her because she stood up for him. Glad you enjoyed the research--I enjoyed it, too!

Reviewer: The_5th_Marauder
Date: 04/08/05 15:02
Chapter: The Hogsmeade Saturday

Wow. I just read through this whole fic and I can’t wait to read some more! The detail that you’ve gone into is amazing; - the background research for the historical facts adds a grounding to the whole story which I think is indispensable; the way that you explore the characters in their entirety, not just what JKR has so far shown us, makes the characters’ actions feel like a natural progression from their 5th year. I must say though, this different Lily is taking some getting used to, but I think it’s just my preconceptions of how I imagine the /real/ Lily to act to be the cause of this, rather than any lack on your part. One great thing about your fic is how you’ve portrayed Severus. I must say that in canon, he was one of my least favourite characters, but by exploring his thoughts that much more and being open to the more Slytherin side of things, I think he’s growing into one of my fave chars. : ) Ooh, and I must say that I am really enjoying having Hermione at the centre of the storyline (instead of the usual Harry), probably as I can identify more with her, and your portrayal of how she is gaining respect for her once-hated potions teacher and the slow changing of her somewhat biased, Gryffindor-centric thinking makes the story very engrossing. Once again, I can’t wait to read more of this amazing fic! Please update soon!!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your kind review! I appreciate you liking sticking Hermione at the center. I identify with her too, even with some of her more unattractive traits, and I liked giving her a friend. I also like thinking about the other houses. I like Harry as well, but due to his upbringing he's very self-centered and doesn't take in much that doesn't center around him. And unfortunately, he's not going to learn the usual adolescent life lesson that it's not all about him. It is. And I hope you continue to find Lily interesting.

Reviewer: Hermione2723
Date: 03/26/05 16:48
Chapter: The Hogsmeade Saturday

Very very very good chap!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: DragonGirl
Date: 03/24/05 17:49
Chapter: The Halloween Ball

I like this story. You see a whole new side of Slytherin! I like that because no one is all evil (except maybe Voldemort). Speaking of which, since Lily is going to help with the war, maybe Draco and the other Slytherins will help to (monkey see, monkey do). I like the direction this story is going in! DragonGirl P.S. Not quite the Lily I imagined, but cool all the same.

Author's Response: Yes, Lily will be a big influence on Slytherin. Sorry I didn't reply before. I've been having trouble with logging in.

Reviewer: Flgirl4life
Date: 03/22/05 12:58
Chapter: The Feather of Ma'at

I can't find the movie quote and it's killing me. Can you tell me please? I really love this story and love the Egyptian stuff in this chap!

Author's Response: "It's only a book. No harm ever came from reading a book." Evelyn to Rick in The Mummy. The book in that case is also The Book of the Dead. Thanks for your review!

Reviewer: Flgirl4life
Date: 03/22/05 12:09
Chapter: The Reading Room

LILY! Lily Potter! Oh, this will be a good story!

Reviewer: MrsBlack
Date: 03/22/05 8:31
Chapter: The Halloween Ball

Really good chapter, I liked the "melding" of past and present thoughts. I also really enjoyed your background piece in the authors notes after the chapter. You really did some homework. I would love to read some of the pieces that you mentioned. If you could e-mail the reference sites to me I would appreciate it. (amy012768@aol)

Author's Response: I couldn't get your email address to work, so I'll answer you here. Actually most of my reference material is in books, not sites. However, if you want to see the painting Snape based Hermione's costume on, look at: The European Witch Craze of the Seventeenth Century is available through Amazon. Another book about the subject is Aldous Huxley's The Devils of Loudun, which deals with how politicans and religious leaders used the witch craze for cynical purposes in one French city in the period. It's also available through Amazon. I invented the wizards at the Elector of Saxony, though he probably did have some men claiming to be wizards there. For the Thirty Years War, there is a great book by C. V. Wedgewood of that name. John Dee is also a real person, who certainly claimed to be a wizard, though he might have actually been more of what we might call a scientist. The line between science and magic was very vague throughout the 17th century. The great Isaac Newton researched extensively in alchemy: the astronomer Johannes Kepler's mother was nearly executed for witchcraft herself, because Kepler wrote a speculative book about travel to the Moon, in which he portrayed himself being transported there by his mother's spells. As to Matthew Hopkins, there is a biography available through Amazon, but also his own book, The Discovery of Witchcraft. Another truly creepy book of the period is the Malleus Maleficarum, or Hammer to Smite Down Witches (also at Amazon). This was a book used throughout the seventeenth century that gave instruction as to the finding, torture and execution of witches. An ugly read. It details ways of tricking women into confessions (First imprison and torture a woman, and tell her she's about to be executed, then disguise yourself and pretend to be the devil, who promises to save the woman from burning alive: the terrified woman agrees to serve the devil in exchange, and then is immediately executed, since she is now officially a follower of the devil, even if she wasn't one previously.) As to the Salem Witch Trials, there is a huge bibliography on the subject, and even a very recent book. Arthur Miller's play The Crucible really hits most of the right notes--the opportunism, the ignorance, the eagerness to believe the worst of your neighbors, so you can snatch up their property after their execution. Was it misogyny, as some claim, or bigotry, or just greedy neighbors? I prefer to say all of the above. Hope this helps! Arsinoe

Reviewer: Hermione2723
Date: 03/16/05 14:36
Chapter: The Halloween Ball

Very good chapter!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: Callista Melaney
Date: 03/13/05 18:28
Chapter: The Potions Slave

Grr..over already! :-( I really like how this story is coming along. Brilliant brilliant brilliant.

Author's Response: Thanks for your support!

Reviewer: Callista Melaney
Date: 03/13/05 16:40
Chapter: The Girl Who Died

Wowza. For the first time, I got excited to read the fic after the summary. Magnificent!

Reviewer: Kerian
Date: 03/13/05 9:55
Chapter: The Potions Slave

Ohh I feel positively awful for Hermione!!! She didnt even realize what she was doing and now all these problems are coming, and she'll have the guilt forever. Poor thing!! I also love seeing the house politcs in Slytherin. Well written! 10 for 10

Author's Response: Thanks! I enjoyed writing the Slytherin politics too!

Reviewer: caren_the_hpfan
Date: 03/02/05 13:22
Chapter: The Potions Slave

Wow. I just read the entire story on Red Hen, and I must say, it was AMAZING! It's one of the best stories I've ever read on Mugglenet. It was so professional! A ten for you, very well deserved.

Author's Response: Well, thank you very much! I'm finally done with writing for awhile and I can start responding to reviews, which I've been very lax about! I'm so glad you went to the Red Hen site! JOdel did a beautiful job and made my story look like one of the turn of the century fairy tale books I used to treasure!

Reviewer: Hermione2723
Date: 02/27/05 7:02
Chapter: The Potions Slave

I like this story a lot! update soon please

Author's Response: Thank you for your reviews. Sorry I've been so slow to respond. I appreciate your interest.

Reviewer: HarrysAunt
Date: 02/26/05 23:48
Chapter: The Potions Slave

This is getting better and better! I hope you add more soon!

Author's Response: Thank you for your reviews! I'm glad your enjoying the story. As you guessed earlier, the Hat did indeed have its reasons for putting Lily where it did!

Reviewer: LunaLunitaLunera
Date: 02/26/05 18:43
Chapter: The Serpents' Den

this is really good!!! ~10~

Author's Response: Thank you! I appreciate the review.

Reviewer: bball33
Date: 02/24/05 17:54
Chapter: The Serpents' Den

wooooooooooooow!!! its awesome. i cant wait 4 the next chapter.

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing! Glad you're enjoying the story!

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