Reviews For Veiled Revelations
Reviewer: Suhaibk93
Date: 07/02/06 12:26
Chapter: Head Boy, Head Girl

Wow. Thats really good. I like the flashbacks and visions a lot.

Author's Response: thank you very much suhaibk, and may i mention that your user name is a lot of fun to attempt to pronounce.

Reviewer: Falcon17
Date: 07/02/06 8:18
Chapter: A Place to Bond

That was really creepy :) Though the tension was gone somehow as you mentioned Alice Longbottom. Maybe you should have spared any known people for the end to increase the fun ^^

Reviewer: Falcon17
Date: 07/02/06 7:34
Chapter: Of Stags and Lions

The story is getting better and better with every chapter. I'm really curious why James' patronus is a Phoenix.

Author's Response: me too, actually. it may have been a crazy whim (i wrote this many many many years ago) but yeah. i think my initial take was that james felt safe with dumbledore, and trusted dumbledore, so when he was younger it took what james saw dumbledore symbolized as: the phoenix. with time, of course, patronuses change.

Reviewer: Falcon17
Date: 07/01/06 16:58
Chapter: Lifestyles

Absolutely awesome the idea of social training. I'm really looking forward to what is coming out of that. And the plot twist with Peter's date is promising! I spotted something weird again, however, with Sirius date. In the scene in the classroom you said he was appointed to Amelia Bones and later it suddenly is Marlene McKinnon.

Author's Response: BLOODY HELL!!!! for a while when it was first being written it was amelia bones who figured into the story instead of marlene, but then i decided i liked marlene better, so i changed it, but i FORGOT that part.... thank you, i'll fix that :)

Reviewer: Falcon17
Date: 07/01/06 14:21
Chapter: Head Boy, Head Girl

I've not read many Marauder fanfics yet but I really like the beginning of this one and I'm looking forward to continue reading it, as the characters seem very authentic. However, I recongnized two small time errors in it. a) If they are starting their second year and Sirius moved in at the Potters two years ago it would have been before their fifth and not before their sixth year. b) You say once they won the Quidditch-Cup foru years in a row and once you say five years.
Furthermore the paragraphs should be seperated more clearly when you are changing the scenery. It got a bit confusing at the beginning then Padfoot and Prongs are outside and all of a sudden come out of a room.

Author's Response: argh stupid phantom. thanks so much. i hate my stupid mistakes (which i will go fix now....) as for the spacing, sometimes this website and i have many arguments, for on my document i have it spaced extra, and then when i transpose it here it doesn't work. but i'll wrestle with it a bit. thanks a million.

Reviewer: Scyth_Realblood
Date: 06/27/06 23:11
Chapter: Now It's Forever

the entire thing was bloody brilliant. boy, you freaked me out. you're sick! but in a good way. i loved it.
good read though...

Author's Response: hahahaaaaaa i'm sick in not-so-good ways too, i think, but thankfully that doesn't come out over the internet (i mean, being a phantom and all, i have much sickening fun scaring the wits out of hapless opera-goers ::evil grin::)

Reviewer: SpyfiTheHPLuver
Date: 06/13/06 23:41
Chapter: Now It's Forever

OMG!!!!!!!!!!! THAT WAS SOOOOOOOOO FREAKING GOOD! I wish so bady that I could read the sequel right now, but I can't becuase it's very late. This is the first marauder era fic that I have read, and I think that I will read more! Although I honestly think that this is going to be the best one!!!!!!!!!!

Reviewer: pudding2009
Date: 06/10/06 19:06
Chapter: Now It's Forever

this is one of the first stories i have read on this site, and it hasn't let me down.
i read this all at once, becuase i siriusly could not put my laptop down. not only am i really hungry right now, but i'm heading to read the sequel next. i absolutley loved this story. i cried a couple times, laughed a lot, and got really mad at characters every once in awhile. there is no doubt in my mind that this is (in my opinion) the best marauders and lily story i have ever read. and that's counting all the ones i've read on, too. this is also my favorite description of Sirius's personality. most authors make him only funny and carefree, but i love the angry side you made for him along with the way he cares for remus. also, you had a fabulous ending to each chapter, most of which made me smile. i hope the sequel is just as good, and please keep writing stories based on the marauders.
your faithful reader,

Reviewer: Drunken_House_Elves
Date: 06/09/06 16:14
Chapter: Lifestyles

aww he's all nervous :D

Reviewer: Drunken_House_Elves
Date: 06/09/06 15:55
Chapter: Snape's Offer

looking forward in finding out who Meliflua is :)

Reviewer: Drunken_House_Elves
Date: 06/09/06 15:16
Chapter: Head Boy, Head Girl

ooo great chapter :) i'm on to the next one

Reviewer: pure blood granger
Date: 06/04/06 1:56
Chapter: Now It's Forever


Author's Response: why thank you :)

Reviewer: bookworm2011
Date: 05/30/06 20:58
Chapter: Now It's Forever

Absolutely amazing!!!I give it an 11/10!

Reviewer: LupinandHarry
Date: 05/30/06 14:35
Chapter: Head Boy, Head Girl

Amazing Story! I loved it all! Perfect character dipictions! 11/10! Hooray for you!

Reviewer: padfootnprongs
Date: 05/22/06 14:19
Chapter: Now It's Forever

hey...nice fanfic....i really liked it...
the way u showed sirius in ur pic...i love him even more then i did before (which was alot)lolz...anywayz...ur fic was awesome! do write some more fics...take care...peace!

Reviewer: lyka
Date: 05/18/06 17:04
Chapter: Head Boy, Head Girl

This is just the most wonderful piece of fan fiction I ever new existed. I've always held a special place in my heart for the Marauders, and have always envisioned them exactly how they were portrayed in your story. So thank you! For actually letting them materialize. I really felt like that could be the final word as to how it really went on the during the troublemaker's years in Hogwarts. Genius! Absolutely brilliant.

Reviewer: APaddyFan
Date: 05/08/06 18:44
Chapter: Now It's Forever

I thought this story was absolutely fantastic! You didn't make it too crazy or to serious (no pun intended). It had all the right elements mixed together. Bravo! 13/10

Reviewer: i_luv_snape
Date: 05/01/06 18:31
Chapter: Now It's Forever

i feel like crying with them. that was a great story

Author's Response: oh my goodness... thank you so much :)

Reviewer: i_luv_snape
Date: 04/30/06 21:42
Chapter: Lions for the Cup

This line "McGonagall was sobbing her heart out on Sirius's shoulder as he patted her on the back." is one of the funiest i have ever read.

Reviewer: JeWb
Date: 04/30/06 16:45
Chapter: Lifestyles


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