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Name: Fynnsmom (Signed) · Date: 10/02/17 17:27 · For: Chapter 5. Hogwarts
It sounds like Lyra was made to feel very welcome into Gryffindor. I think she and Harry will be surprised to find out they're cousins. I wonder what difference Lyra's knowing Snape will affect his relationship with Harry.

Name: Fynnsmom (Signed) · Date: 09/24/17 9:59 · For: Chapter 4. The Hogwarts Express
I think Dad said something to the effect that this story grows on you. I agree. I don't know if I'd give up the Prologue but maybe edit it a little. I almost didn't come back to read this story because of the Prologue but I'm glad I did continue reading. Draco seems fairly nice while Lyra's brother continues to be an ass. I'm interested to see which House Lyra gets sorted into. And, I wonder how she'll get along with Harry. I'm so glad she found Finn. She could end up being friends with the twins and maybe all of the Weasleys.

Name: Dad (Signed) · Date: 09/22/17 18:34 · For: Chapter 4. The Hogwarts Express
The first chapter left me slightly confused, but I must admit this story is growing on me.

Name: Fynnsmom (Signed) · Date: 09/22/17 16:22 · For: Chapter 3. Caelum
Thanks for answering my questions. I've read so much fan fiction that sometimes I can't tell canon from something else I've read. I once had a little poodle named Fynn. His full name was Fynnegan. Caelum kind of seems like an ass. I couldn't believe what he said about Molly. He made her sound like an inhuman monster. All I could envision was a fat being with a huge mouth. I wonder where Lyra will be sorted. I wasn't thinking. Lyra and Caelum weren't raised to be aware of their Potter relatives so they wouldn't have any idea about their cousin, Harry.

Author's Response: Haha, no worries, I do find sometimes when you read so much fanfiction it can sometimes merge in one and then can get a tad confusing at times. Aww bless, I really like the name Fynn! What a lovely name to have called your poodle though! Caelum is a bit of an arse. You'll understand his behaviour a bit as time progresses and you see more of him. Lyra accepts his behaviour because that's just the way Caelum is. There can be psychological effects when a child is an orphan, and Caelum was three years of age when he was adopted by the Malfoy family. :) I will be delving into it deeper as the school years progress. Both Lyra and Caelum are aware that Harry defeated Lord Voldemort, but they are not aware how closely linked they are together, and it will stay that while for some time. :)

Name: Fynnsmom (Signed) · Date: 09/21/17 18:17 · For: Chapter 2. Lyra
I'm glad Lyra actually got a chance to meet the Weasley twins rather than just listen to her brother about avoiding them. I thought the joke shop had a different name--Zonko's--but I guess you don't have to use that name if you don't want to. Lyra doesn't seem to realize that Harry is her cousin but I guess she was real young when she went to the Malfoy's.

Author's Response: Hi, Fynnsmom! Thanks for your review! Zonko's is in Hogsmeade, which will most likely be visited once Lyra is in her 3rd year perhaps. I haven't got that far yet 🙂 Gambol and Japes Is the joke shop in Diagon Alley. All Lyra knows about her father is that he's a Potter and that he was in Gryffindor. Both she and her brother associate Gryffindor as a terrible House because of how the Malfoys have brought them up. There will be a point that Lyra and Caelum will find out how closely related they are to Harry and how it will affect them both. Since the reason Harry had to stay with the Dursleys was because he had to be out with family for the protection to still work for him. There will be a reason as to why they weren't put together. 🙂

Name: Fynnsmom (Signed) · Date: 09/21/17 17:39 · For: Chapter 1. Adoption
I was confused but I think I might have the story straight now. When you first mentioned Potter I thought you meant Harry but then you had Draco as a child--so Potter meant Harry's uncle I think. Then one of Narcissa's sisters--unknown up until now was married to Harry's uncle and she's died. In the end, the Malfoys have adopted their niece and nephew who are actually Potters. This chapter was more interesting to me than the first. We'll see what happens next.

Name: Fynnsmom (Signed) · Date: 09/18/17 1:53 · For: Prologue
This was a promising start. I don't think I've ever heard Voldemort referred to as just the Lord before. It's always been Lord Voldemort or the Dark Lord. I guess there was no confusion over the "person" they were referring to. Nor have I ever heard Narcissa called Narcissi. Interesting.

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