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Reviews For Emmeline

Name: Fynnsmom (Signed) · Date: 08/12/17 18:31 · For: Chapter 2: Ashes
I have to say that this chapter was a lot more enjoyable to read and was more understandable. I felt so bad that Gideon died although I knew he and Fabian did. I know what Emmaline feels like. It always seemed that when we were married my ex-husband always dropped what he was doing and run to help someone else. But when I could've used his help and support or our children needed him he was too busy. I always wondered why but lately I've been thinking that maybe he thought I was fully capable of taking care of myself and our children. Maybe he didn't think we were needy. It's a thought.

Name: Fynnsmom (Signed) · Date: 08/07/17 19:39 · For: Chapter 1: Emmeline
I enjoyed this chapter and look forward to more. My criticism is that the writing seemed a little choppy, like there were words missing or concepts to tie the paragraphs together. I got the gist of the story but it was difficult. Or maybe I'm just over tired. I'll keep reading it at any rate because I really like your stories!

Author's Response: Yeah I am definitely going to clean up the chapter and go back to an editor. You're right. I will clean it up and do careful edits before I submit. Thanks for reading. Jenn

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