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(Signed) · Date:
04/17/17 6:11 · For:
A Made Bed
Hard work reading this. I had to think why? It may be I have forgotten a lot of things from previous stories but this had a lot of threads with no background. It will need another read, but I have qualms about being an unmarried mother twice while sleeping with two men at the same time. May be I am just getting old?
Author's Response: Dad
I hope this serves as a genuine review response because you are not one of those people who needs wool pulled over your eyes. You tell it straight. As a writer, I've considered fan fiction practice writing. You're right that I can't just draft something, do a read over, and all what's done done. This is probably the best review that I've gotten because you are telling me that I am wrong. You don't hand people's hand, which I want you to know makes you valuable as a reviewer. In the real world, it's like you present it without fake fluff of this or that is awesome simply to here it's awesome. I needed to hear that there was no background nor development to see that. I will take my time rewriting this and follow your critique to the best letter I can. I understand your line of this needs a second read means this: You fabricated this. It is not done. Take it back. Rewrite. Better luck. Thank you, thank you for the honesty and sharp eye. Hopefully, I can do better. Thanks for the read and the review.