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Name: Fynnsmom (Signed) · Date: 07/06/16 16:29 · For: What The Thestrals Did
I always find it interesting to read how many different creatures and beings helped out during the Hogwarts Battle. I guess I wouldn't have thought about thestrals. I could feel Jack's anxiety. If I have something to do that I don't want to do I will put it off until the last second, feeling anxious the entire time.

Author's Response: Yes, there's just a half of a sentence in the final battle scene of Book 7 that mentions the thestrals attacking the giants, and there are only a couple of places where the thestrals are described, in Book 5, but enough to flesh out a story about them. Here's a question: if one must have witnessed death in order to be able to see them, and if Harry qualified after witnessing the death of Cedric Diggory, then why didn't he see the thestrals at the end of Book 4 when he and his friends are riding in the carriages back to the Hogsmeade train station? Hmm. Thank you so much for your review.

Name: Alfred McEniff (Signed) · Date: 06/08/16 5:05 · For: What The Thestrals Did
Brilliant story, but I belive that when talking about cleaning the thestrals,
("He prayed that Scourgify would prove sufficient to wash it off") it would be more correct to say
"A cleaning charm would prove sufficient to wash it off"

(Also, I think that it's spelt 'lumos maxima' and not 'maximus')

Author's Response: Thank you for your review. I'm very glad you like the story. And thanks for your constructive suggestions. I did a little research and found that "lumos maxima" is only in the films, not in the books, so that's probably why I hadn't seen it. And "lumos" is not an actual Latin word, so we can't determine if it's inherently masculine or feminine. So "lumos maxima" it is.

I am curious about your rationale for the other suggestion. If you read this response, let me know, since I always strive to avoid mistakes. Thank you again for reading.

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