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Name: Morbius Liadon (Signed) · Date: 03/02/16 1:10 · For: Chapter 1- Picking Up Where We Left Off
Very well written! Can't wait for more! As a quick note, there are a few small mistakes I noticed. First, there are a few typos I noticed. Nothing big at all, just letting you know so you and you're beta readers can be on the lookout. Secondly, I noticed two occasions when you had people using the summoning spell Accio on the Deathly Hallows. If memory serves, the canon mentions that the Hallows were immune to such spells. No big deal if you wanted that changed for whatever reason, but thought I would mention it in case it was an oversight. For your reference, the two cases you had them do this was Harry trying to find the stone in the forest, and Ginny summoning Harry's Elder Wand in the Lestrange vault.

Again, great writing! I'm eager to read more and love how well you are portraying the characters!

Author's Response: Hey Morbius thanks for taking the time to leave me a review :). I'll try and keep a lookout for them but those pesky little words occasionally fall through the gaps. Google docs just doesn't do a great job catching a lot of them. In regards to the Deathly Hallows and the accio spell... I actually found no research pointing to the fact that the wand and stone couldn't be summoned. Only the cloak. I only know because I thought the same thing you did until my beta pointed it out. I think the cloak is just special because of its hiding powers ect. If you have direct info that points otherwise though let me know and I'll change it :)

Name: Fynnsmom (Signed) · Date: 01/27/16 18:51 · For: Chapter 1- Picking Up Where We Left Off
I think this is a very good start, especially as long as it is. It took me a few chapters to get as many words as you have in your first. If I were to be at all critical I didn't care for the end too much. I'm glad Harry went back and retrieved the Resurrection Stone. I always thought it was a shame that he tossed everything but his Invisibility Cloak away. I thought Hermione's reaction though was a little over the top. I don't think it was any of her business what Harry did. But that is my only critical comment. You did an excellent job for your first writing attempt. Hope you update soon.

Author's Response: Thanks! Next chapter will be submitted today. I can understand your feeling about Hermione's response, but I guess I was just thinking about how tired and emotional she'd already be with everything that happened. Hope you enjoy the update though!

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