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Name: Fynnsmom (Signed) · Date: 08/05/15 22:57 · For: Summoning
Wonderful. I was surprised by the appearance of the Egyptian wizard. So this is how Ollivander gets into the wand-making business. Can you make your own wand? Update soon please.

Author's Response: Chapter 5 is proving tricky (three characters with something important to say about themselves, plus Greek tragedy live on stage...). I know it's taking a while, but I promise it will appear.


Name: Dad (Signed) · Date: 07/07/15 14:40 · For: Summoning
Enjoying this very different story.

Author's Response: You're welcome.


Name: Kerichi (Signed) · Date: 07/07/15 10:22 · For: Summoning
What? Moeris steals the Wand of Orpheus, casts an Unforgiveable Curse, and Callias doesn't explain why they're not running to the wizard authorities to report this? Are there no Auror counterparts in Athens? Why doesn't Ollivander think to ask? There's Muggle government, Muggle law enforcement, but not wizard?

I'm just being dramatic, I'm not really upset at how the chapter ended, although if I was Olli (I hope you don't mind me calling him Olli, if you do, tough--I mean, I'll keep it my head. ^_~) I'd be tempted to use a Summoning Spell on Callias's wand and ask, "How about I take yours and suggest you get Simaetha to make a new wand?"

OK, enough teasing about the ending. Your descriptions are stellar, as usual. You have a definite knack for immersing the reader into the setting and feeling like he or she is there in Athens, in a butcher's shop or atop the Acropolis.


Something new I've noticed this chapter is your very JKR-like use of dialogue tags. They clarify how something is said when it could be indignant instead of "hot desperation," but sometimes they repeat what's already conveyed by the dialogue, such as: “Maybe, but not today,” he temporised. and “I've seen it done once or twice,” Callias replied casually.


Just some things to consider. You've given readers loads of things to think about, (especially romantic sorts like me who think pushing a sister on a bloke you just met means there's something really wrong with that girl and Ollie is better off with Hermione of the remarkable eyes :D) and we'll be hoping chapter five posts soon!

Author's Response: Firstly, thanks for reading and reviewing. It's great to hear that I'm writing for someone besides myself, and even more fun that you're shipping my characters even as they hit the page. :) In the ancient world (as I'm imagining it) there is much less separation between the Muggle and wizarding communities than in modern times. All the Muggles believe in magic, even if they can't do it themselves, so naturally the Muggle laws and authorities cover magical behaviour too. (There is some interesting non-fictional source material to this effect in Daniel Ogden's book (Magic, witchcraft, and ghosts in the Greek and Roman worlds), on which I have relied.) Callias says something along these lines in Chapter 1, but your review made me realize I missed a trick by not mentioning it in this chapter too, so I have made some edits to the dialogue following Moeris' exit. As for Unforgiveable Curses: there aren't any, yet; nor is Azkaban yet built. Ancient Greece could be a rough place.


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