Reviewer: Wenlock
Date: 08/06/14 20:46
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This is a fun read. Its a neat idea and well written. I like that Gulka invented indoor plumbing, and the part about the genius squirrels. The only improvement I can think of would be to expand it a bit, mainly the second-to-last paragraph. Having a few more detailed strange tales about the tree would make it more like an old legend.

Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time. I am glad and very grateful for the positive feedback. I still feel that the writing style of the first few paragraphs is too dense and convoluted. There is a certain whimsy and dark humour to Harry Potter that I have always admired and attempted to emulate in this story. The original plan called for a story at least three-times this length with further examples of the Tree's destructive influence over the years and then a lengthy explanation of what exactly happened when Voldemort reaches the Tree, including what I imagine the process of creating a horcrux to be. Ultimately I decided against it and cut vast parts out in an effort to maintain the tone I had struck at the beginning. I am hugely flattered that your only suggestion is to ask for more of the same. Thank you again.

Reviewer: foolondahill17
Date: 08/04/14 15:53
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I really liked this. It was a very clever idea and equally cleverly executed. I found the idea of intelligent squirrels wiping out the village to be very entertaining. Well done.

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