Reviews For Panic
Reviewer: dmbw7052
Date: 05/02/14 9:39
Chapter: Chapter 1

Hello, I'm Georgia. I just finished reading this chapter and simply cannot wait to read more. Next gen is my favorite category, and this shows so much promise. Can't wait for the next chapter!

I really like how you took an often cliched character and made her your own. Lily Luna is often portrayed as being either exactly like Ginny, or like Lily. But no child is exactly the same as her relatives. I noticed that you gave her black hair, which I think was absolutely brilliant. Its great when you can take a character and really make them your own.

What confused me a bit was the whole auror training bit. Are they in their seventh year, and it's part of the classes at Hogwarts? I just wasn't sure. Perhaps you could just add a paragraph or so explaining how it works.

Another thing I liked was how you called the old Death Eaters "Riddle's Children." It shows that who Voldemort really was had been revealed. I did think some sort of reference to them being the new Death Eaters could have been added, but I really liked how you portrayed them as really never doing anything. I think without a leader, they weren't all that bold.

The end scene was very surprising and unexpected, and I liked how Lily's thoughts and actions were so frantic. I'm excited to read the next chapter!

-Georgia

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