Reviews For Innocents
Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 06/18/14 12:13
Chapter: Chapter 1

I'm sure Pansy felt very odd now that the Death Eaters had lost the Battle. I always kind of wondered what happened to some of the students when it was all over. I've had the feeling that Pansy cared for Draco way more than he cared for her.

Author's Response: Thank you for the review. I've always felt very interested in Slytherin house, and wanted to portray their mixed loyalities in this fic, especially Pansy's emotions, confused as they must have been after the final battle and crumbling of the pure-blood regime. Thank you again for leaving a comment.

Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 04/10/14 11:23
Chapter: Chapter 1

Oh, interesting. I've just written a Pansy fic myself, so I like reading other versions of her.

I wasnl't quite sure about this at first because it appeared that you've given Pansy a strength that I wasn;t sure she'd had. I thought she'd run and not even stay, you see. But I think this was well written and did fit with the Pansy we know from canon. Referencing her wanting to hand Harry over was a good idea because that's the one thing we really remember about her.

The OC, Sophie, did seem a little unnecessary. You could, perhaps, have used Millicent, or Tracey because you didn't leave yourself much time to develop her character. She was a good foil to Pansy, though, being someone who stayed but cried.

I loved the confrontation with Draco. I think this was a great part of the story because we know exactly what's gone on before, but Pansy doesn't. I ached for her to be able to get some closure with him, but he went and left her! Oh dear. It strikes me as unfair that Draco gets his redemption, but poor old Pansy gets it in the neck time and time again from the fandom because she does something that really some of the others must have been thinking. (I mean when she denounces Harry)

Great recollections at the end. there's a real sense of her isolation here, and the reader understands that Pansy no longer has somewhere she can call home.

Sad ending for her. Good story, though and interesting characterisation. Well done. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thank you very much for your review. I really appreciate the feedback. Sophie Roper is actually on J.K. Rowling's class list of students in Harry's year. However, she isn't given a House and I chose to put her in Slytherin. Sorry, though, I probably could have explained that better :) Thanks again for the review.

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