It is very good!!! I like it!!!
This felt like the beginning of a chapter. It needs to start the plot and set the scene. Looking out foe more.
Author's Response: Thanks for your feedback - I was on the fence about submitting this as prologue (or using it as a chapter beginning), but settled on the prologue because it gives away a lot of clues as to what's going to happen in the story. It may not seem like it now but I promise it'll be much more relevant once a few more chapters show up! Ch. 1 is awaiting validation now.