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03/18/14 2:17 · For:
Thanks for this story. Most stories are written from the point of view of people who did get heavily involved, on one side or other, in the titanic struggle convulsing the magical world.
This story, told by someone who chooses to remain neutral, is thought provoking and a little unsettling.
It is not quite clear form this story why Tracy chose to remain neutral. Was it fear, resentment that at such a young age the choice had to be made, or perhaps she somehow absorbed the family philosophy of not getting involved.
It does seem that getting inspired by Emmaline and Dorcas after the war is all a little too late, safe and convenient when, presumably, she was surrounded by people making courageous choices during the war. Tracey is hardly alone, though. Most people stayed neutral or, worse, like Tracey’s father, collaborated with Voldemort’s regime. All the same, it is hardly an admirable stance.
Your story is an interesting study of someone coming to terms with their new situation and their choices post war. I must admit, that I found the following paragraph difficult:
“Yet Emmeline and Dorcas choosing to fight didn’t make Tracey feel like a coward for not staying to fight in the Battle of Hogwarts. It was a reaffirmation that some must fight their own battles before they can take on the world’s.”
I wouldn’t necessarily expect Tracey to be feeling like a coward, but I would expect her to be a little more conflicted and to feel a little more guilt or perhaps regret at her choices. I haven’t read your other stories so perhaps I am missing the necessary backstory.
In summary, I found your story interesting and enjoyable to read and thought provoking to boot. Thanks for writing,
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03/15/14 10:42 · For:
That felt very real.
Name: the opaleye
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03/15/14 7:46 · For:
I absolutely love this story, Jess. I am half-asleep and slightly drunk so I apologise in advance if this review is a bit odd.
I really like the way you have set up Tracey's background. It's interesting to see her father guilty of aiding Death Eater's rather than actually being one. We know that goes on in every conflict, and I think it's important to show that in the context of the wizarding world, too. It's also interesting seeing it from the perspective of his family, through his daughter's eyes, rather than his own. There is the bitterness of their current financial situation, Tracey's doubts that maybe she was no better than her father when she chose not to take a side, and also the knowledge that what he did was wrong and that he deserves his punishment despite the trauma it's causing her family. I thought you constructed that backstory and context so so well. It was a new story, yet so very fitting for the Potterverse, and it made these nearly-OC characters come to life in an absolute and complete way.
I also loved the relationship between Tracey and Willa, and the way you weave their history into the history of Dorcas. Gah! It was just so well done! The construction of this fic amazed me. It's so well paced and thought out. Am I repeating myself? I think so. But yes, I loved the relationship between Willa and Tracey, and the way Willa finally opens up to her daughter and then Tracey opens up to her mother. As someone who loves listening to family stories, I really liked the ending.
They are still in a dire situation, and yet it almost feels like a fresh start for both of them. It's a hopeful fic when it could easily have been the opposite.
Also, all hail the female-led non-romance fic! Such a great variety of female characters. A++++++.
I'm so glad I chose this for my bedtime reading.