Reviews For Serenade
Reviewer: hestiajones
Date: 06/19/14 14:08
Chapter: Chapter 5 ~ Epiphanies

I nearly died laughing there. This is prolly my fav plot twist ever LOL. Oh, darling Terry.

Of course it's not happy ever after for them, 'cause he marries Hestia Jones!!

:p Thank you for this breezy, fun-filled ride!

Author's Response: Yes, he was an idiot and not a hero. Well, he was a hero but didn't get a scar for it. Ha ha. Uhm, he might just stick with her - depends if I ever write them again. Ta lots ~Carole

Author's Response: Yes, he was an idiot and not a hero. Well, he was a hero but didn't get a scar for it. Ha ha. Uhm, he might just stick with her - depends if I ever write them again. Ta lots ~Carole

Reviewer: hestiajones
Date: 06/19/14 13:42
Chapter: Chapter 2 ~ Minutiae

voulez vous coucher avec moi?

Author's Response: Ce soir? Um, maybe .... ;D

Reviewer: hestiajones
Date: 06/19/14 13:33
Chapter: Chapter 1 - Masks

I am sorry but my excitement at seeing Golumpierre's name has overwhelmed everything else.

Author's Response: Hahahahah - I HAD to include him in a story. My fanfiction life wouldn;t have been complete without him. Thank youuuu ~Carole

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 04/06/14 12:33
Chapter: Chapter 5 ~ Epiphanies

Good characters. Very enjoyable.

Author's Response: Thank you! I liked writing it :)

Reviewer: WeasleyMom
Date: 04/05/14 15:25
Chapter: Chapter 5 ~ Epiphanies

Carole, you've done it again. You've taken two seemingly random characters and made them work together. I didn't doubt you, but I do have a bit of an attachment to Terry, and as such, was crinkling my nose at him "settling" for Pansy. But you made it work, as you always do.

There's something in canon about Draco that makes him more redeemable. We see how his parents treat him, how little choice he seems to have at times (not excusing him, mind you), and how he struggles with himself over and over, sometimes even doing the right thing. And so he is ripe for a redemption story, and we have all written them. In contrast, I can't think of a single redeeming thing about Pansy in canon. She is hateful, the mean girl that everyone hated in high school, and what more could there possibly be to her? I like that you used this very contrast, between Draco and her, to show how unfair it is that Draco is eligible for redemption and Pansy is not. That was so well done, and the choice to have it pointed out by a friend was even better. Because as the reader, I agreed with them both. I'd read enough to believe Pansy shouldn't be defined by what she did in the battle, and yet, Anthony speaks truth, too. You handled it all so very well. It was important that you didn't minimize her crime either, but instead drew it out to its conclusion: Voldemort Might Have Won. I think her realizing this was important for her character development and for her being able to move forward with Terry.

Beautiful twist in having Terry's scar be the result of a drunken night when we all (including Pansy) assumed it was the badge of a hero. Hilarious turn, and I was grinning as I read.

I was reminded as I sank into this that I haven't read anything from in a while, and I've missed it. You have such a flow, such a good word choice all the time... every word is necessary, nothing ever in need of editing, and I find myself envious of that skill when I read your stories. So good. :)

I think we've discussed creative/unusual structuring in fics before, such as the frequent use of parentheses, so you know I'm not uaually a fan. They can be off-putting or distracting or something. But I can see why you chose to use them here, particularly to indicate a flashback or an aside in Terry's thoughts. We should chat about this sometime, as I'm wondering if you lean toward including them as part of your style of writing these days, or if you rather think certain fics lend themselves to it. Either way, it worked well here.

Great story, Carole. You made me think Pansy could deserve Terry, and that is quite an accomplishment. Hehe.

Author's Response: Thank you for such a gorgeous review, Lori. It really made my day/week/month.

Okay, parenthesis first. I am rather addicted to them at the moment, and think I probably over use them, but here there was a definite reason to show inner thoughts or flashbacks. I will tell you that I've started using them far more since reading The Casual Vacancy (and also Cuckoo'd Calling) because JK uses them to show flashbacks. It was odd first seeing that when I'm more used to italics, due to reading and writing online, but actually I soon got into the style and decided I liked it.

Onto Pansy: When I was writing this, I googled Pansy and discovered JK really didn;t have a good word to say about her at all. She's said Pansy is an amalgamation of all the girls that bullied her at school, so I can understand why she'd hate her to have a happy ending. I don't like Pansy in canon, either, but when you see what she did compared with Draco, then why can't she be capable of redemption. Since becoming consumed by the fandom, I do think JK did a disservice to the majority of her Slytherins (and the Claws, too) because they come across as very one-dimensional boo-hiss evil. I think she does possibly regret that because she said afterwards that some of the Slytherins returned to the Battle to fight FOR Harry, I just wish she'd written a line or two. Mind you, that gives us so much more to play with:) Pansy is a b****, and I hope I've shown that because I don't want this to be an apologist fic, but that doesn;t mean she wouldn't be able to lead a vaguely happy and possibly better life.

Ha ha - yeah, I wanted Terry's scar to be something unconnected to the Battle because everyone would assume he was a hero, except those that were at the firework night. I imagine that after the Battle, several of the fighters went off the rails for a while, so that's why I thought a drunken mishap was quite likely. Plus, being a Claw, he's bound to think he knows best - ha ha. I am mean to the Claws, really, I think I'm worse to them than to the Slyths.

Thank you again for such a fantastic review and I'm blushing at the compliments. ~Carole

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 04/05/14 1:01
Chapter: Chapter 5 ~ Epiphanies

I think they'll have a good chance for a happily ever after. Terry is a typical bright person. He's intelligent but maybe doesn't have any common sense. His scar story was interesting. All this time I thought he go I in the battle. I must be hungry. I'm grieving over the loss of the picnic but I'm too lazy to go find food of my own.

Author's Response: Yes, I deliberately didn't want it to be a Battle scar. I also imagined that several of the fighters went off the rails after that last year and the Battle, so I decided to include that in the story. Terry is a bit of an idiot, and yes, I think you're right, very intelligent, but not much common sense. I'd like them to find some kind of happiness together, whether it's the ever-after kind, I don't know, but then do we know about anyone. - I've gone deep - ooops. Thanks for the review. ~Carole

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 04/05/14 0:46
Chapter: Chapter 4 ~ Achilles' Heel

That was so sweet. Aside from the scene when Pansy might have fallen in the river it all seemed so perfect. Pansy shared some secrets from her Hogwarts days. I think that was a sign of trust.

Author's Response: The loss of her shoes would have hit her far too hard, I think :D. Yes, she unwound a little in this chapter and showed a slightly more vulnerable side. I'm not sure about the trust, though, I think it's more that she doesn't care who knows. Thanks for the review. ~Carole~

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 03/24/14 16:36
Chapter: Chapter 3 ~ Glamour

Pansy seems excited by impending conflict. I loved how you ended the chapter. Just when Jean-Paul thought he was safe Pansy sprang a surprise on him.

Author's Response: Mwahahahah - yeah, Pansy likes a scrap. She thrives on discord! Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 03/18/14 13:06
Chapter: Chapter 2 ~ Minutiae

I had a feeling that despite all of her bravado, Pansy wasn't totally confident about herself and that was the real reason she didn't want to go out with Terry. I'm glad he didn't shrink away from her. Now he'll go to Paris and who knows what can happen there.

Author's Response: You might be right ... Oh, things will happen in Paris. :) Thank you. ~Carole

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 03/18/14 12:20
Chapter: Chapter 2 ~ Minutiae

Just gets better.

Author's Response: Thank you.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 03/18/14 12:04
Chapter: Chapter 1 - Masks

I know that violas and pansies are similar but I didn't know viola was Latin for pansy. So, it seems that Pansy wasn't as interested in Terry himself, or was she? I'm not sure I could be that bold. I don't know if I could have told Pansy that I'd found her.

Author's Response: Pansy said she did't know who he was, however she did give him a not totally false name so he could ahve found her easily - even if he hadn't known who she was. Terry's interested in her, maybe just for a fling, but he's certainly fancied her for a few years. Thanks for the review ~Carole~

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 03/14/14 12:17
Chapter: Chapter 1 - Masks

Look forward to more.

Author's Response: Goodo. I hope you enjoy it. Thanks for the review. ~Carole

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