Reviewer: beatriceflower
Date: 03/09/14 10:54
Chapter: Chapter 1

pleasseee upload the second chapter soon really enjoying this story so far!!

Reviewer: beatriceflower
Date: 02/19/14 11:50
Chapter: Chapter 1

please add the next chapter soon! ive really enjoying it

Author's Response: Thank you! The next chapter should be up this week.

Reviewer: beatriceflower
Date: 02/19/14 11:50
Chapter: Chapter 1

please add the next chapter soon! ive really enjoying it

Reviewer: baby54boomer
Date: 02/13/14 22:42
Chapter: Chapter 1

Plot setting aside, the story became much more interesting when the dialogue was injected into the narrative.

Be very cautious as you proceed: the temptation to simply supply information rather than develop interaction between characters is great. Choose your words wisely, both spoken and descriptive. A varied vocabulary will strengthen the reader's resolve to look for your story regularly. While your premise of a hate-to-love (lust?) relationshio between Draco and Hermione is not new, you have an opportunity to bring an unique spin to the 'ship.
Good luck.

Author's Response: Thank you for this awesome feedback! I agree about the dialogue vs narrative. For the purpose of an intro, narrative is what I went with. Hopefully you'll enjoy the unique spin I have planned for this pair.

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 02/11/14 15:45
Chapter: Chapter 1

I am quite shocked you had Hermione's parents divorce.

Author's Response: It is AU and for the plot, there needed to be something. I'm interested to read your thoughts as it's developed more. Thanks!

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 02/10/14 14:03
Chapter: Chapter 1

So far, so good. I love Draco and Hermione stories. I never thought Draco was interested in Pansy but was only using her. Hope you update soon.

Author's Response: Thank you!

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