Reviews For A Light in the Gap
Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx
Date: 07/16/14 19:58
Chapter: A Light in the Gap

Hi Lori :)

So as I was trawling through the QSQ nominations, I found this beautiful story was nominated by Jess, and I have to say, I was blown away when I read it. When I first started out in fanfiction, I read heaps of missing moments, and I distinctly remember reading several versions of why Ron and Hermione had fallen asleep that night holding hands. Your version, though, blew all those stories out of the water, honestly. I loved Ron’s characterisation and also how poignant his conversation with Hermione was, especially the promise he made at the end.

One of the best things about this story is its subtlety. So much of Ron’s character is conveyed just through the description of Grimmauld Place, of his unease at how “creepy” it was. I loved the atmosphere of intimacy, created by the fact that they were sleeping in the same room, combined Ron’s unfamiliarity with Hermione’s sleeping patterns and her being so close to him. It added to tension of the scene, especially when Hermione didn’t immediately respond to him. As you are the queen of all things Romione, I was not surprised at all by how effortlessly you conveyed the imperfections and rough edges of their relationship, especially at this point in DH. I think that is so much more realistic and close to canon that way.

Hermione was portrayed so well, too. Her dialogue was spot on, and despite the tension in the fic at the beginning, I laughed too when Ron made that crack about Kreacher. And, of course, typical of Hermione, the way she jumped to defend Kreacher in spite of everything he said to her was so in-character. It was nice to see Ron’s appreciation of that. :) On another note, Hermione’s vulnerability and moment of emotion about her parents was so heartbreaking to read. One thing I wished I saw in the books was the moment when Hermione Obliviated her parents (although I was kind of compensated by the fact that the scene was in the movie), and seeing how much it upset her was definitely the most touching part in the fic.

Ron’s promise was so sweet, as was the line when he thinks, “Let Harry pry their hands apart in the morning”. It made me smile to see that side of Ron that was lost a bit later on in DH when they were in the tent. It also made for a wonderful ending to your story, which for me slotted perfectly into canon in a way none of the other twenty-odd versions of this story did, because of how in-character they both were, and of the conversation they had which just made so much sense for later events.

That’s it from me. I really enjoyed this and I hope it wins the QSQ, because you certainly deserve it. ♥

Soraya xxx

Reviewer: WittyRavenclawWriter
Date: 02/16/14 11:17
Chapter: A Light in the Gap

This is such a sweet little story... I could definitely see this happening in the actual book. I've been reading a lot of Hermione/Draco and Hermione/Harry fan fictions lately, so this was a breath of fresh air from all those stories and reminded me who was really meant for Hermione. I loved the way it was written- It was so easy to picture the scenes, and understand what Ron was thinking... Very good story! I'll be looking for more written by you!

Author's Response: Oh, yay! I'm so glad you liked this one and that you found Shell Cottage as well. I branch out once in a while, but lately, I've been missing the days when I wrote primarily Ron-Hermione. So I decided to finish this as its been sitting on my hard drive for so long. Thanks so much for the kind words and for taking the time to leave a review. I really appreciate it!

Reviewer: Northumbrian
Date: 02/10/14 13:48
Chapter: A Light in the Gap


I can't remember the last time I felt the urge to click on a story on this site and read it. actually, I can, now that I think about it. But we won't go there, because I was the victim of misleading advertising. With you, however, I can guarantee that I'll be reading a story about Ron and Hermione, and not a story about two entirely different characters with the same names.

This is not a long story, but it's brilliantly written and I can't even find a Britpick in it! I love Ron's worries, his constant panic that he'll say, or do, the wrong thing. I love the way you show Hermione's vulnerabilities, too. Thank you.

-N-


Author's Response: Yay! I'm so glad you did decide to click and that you weren't disappointed! I so appreciate what you said about the characterization. It means a lot coming from a canon stickler like you (takes one to know one, yes?). I would consider it a colossal failure if the characters did not ring true. And the icing on the cake... no Britpicks! Mwahahaha! It's because I've been practicing and getting better. Between you and Carole, I hope to never feature a sidewalk or a front yard in any of my stories ever again. :)

Thanks again for the click and for the fab review, Neil! ~ Lori

Reviewer: Silk born
Date: 02/05/14 17:46
Chapter: A Light in the Gap

I've been looking for a story of that night and I have read some till now, but none of them made complete sense! This story is the best story of that night in my opinion...and it's the kind that I can believe might have actually happened. So...great job!
P.S. The title is very good too!

Author's Response: So glad I wasn't the only one sitting around wondering what the deal was with that hand-holding business. Hehe. It's good to hear you found this version believable and satisfying. It was fun to write. Thanks for the comment about the title -- I changed it from the original drabble and think this one suits better as well. Thanks again. I'm so grateful when readers take the time to leave a review. ~ Lori

Reviewer: WeasleyforKing
Date: 02/04/14 22:53
Chapter: A Light in the Gap

When I saw that you had written another story, WeasleyMom, I was thrilled. "Scenes from Shell Cottage" is one of my favorite stories of all time, and I wanted to thank you for writing it. "A Light in the Gap" is as good as expected; you seem to understand Ron and Hermione on a different level. The subtleties of their interactions are what make their relationship so special - this story gives them their due.

Author's Response: Thanks so much. I'm glad Shell Cottage is a favorite of yours and that you decided to click on this one, too. I have so many of the Ron/Hermione missing moments floating around in my daydreams... trying to get more of them down this year, I hope. So glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for leaving a review--I really appreciate it when readers take the time. ~ Lori

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