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Name: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor (Signed) · Date: 06/12/14 4:12 · For: Chapter 4 - Winter Sun

This is so lush. So many stories featuring unlikely pairings end just when the relationship starts, usually because both author and reader know it won't last and don't want to think about it. The first ZacMac fic was like that, I think - two irrepressible gits in a nebulous relationship. This fic, however, picks up after what one might consider the inevitable crash 'n' burn, and builds it back up.

I think I like Cormac's characterisation the most, because you see how concerned he still is about what people think of him and allows himself to be controlled by his father, even if it's not for entirely selfish reasons. Towards the end, you see that he is taking a bullet for Zach by not making him a target for Cormac's dad.

Zach, of course, never realised this because he had always been so oblivious about the nuances of publicity. He saw and acknowledged that he was overlooked and it bothered Zach to an extent, but it didn't define who he was.

The part about Zach's dad was so very horrible to think about, so I was relieved when Jethro wasn't suffering. Sure, Zach took it so hard and probably thought about the circumstances of his father's dementia every day, but it gave him a humanity that he had lacked (certainly) in canon, and even in Truth or Dare. I nearly cried when he did because I understood what it meant for him to get to that point and the level of heartbreak and despair it entailed.

I like Romilda so much. Her laissez-faire attitude and droll sense of amusement (usually at Cormac's expense) make her an inviting change against Cormac's borderline alcoholism and lack of drive to make his own destiny. She makes him a better person, even if they couldn't work things out between them. Moreover, though, I think her true feelings of friendship make her Cormac's best and greatest ally. She could've easily ruined both Zach and Cormac by slipping a few sordid lines into her column, but she didn't. It makes her respectable in a characteristically non-respectable line of work, and thus an enjoyable contradiction.

Your storytelling is smooth and lovely, as usual. I found myself swept away by the fic and never wanted it to end. You really know how to write unsympathetic characters and make them light up a page, both good and bad. There are so many little things, like word choice and dialogue tags and so many others, that highlight the best portions of your writing and make the story just that much better.

Cheers, and thank you for the delicious slashiness.


Author's Response: Romilda is entirely down to you and the lushness of Steel Hearts :D.

Um, thank you very much for such a lovely review. I agree ZacMac was a pairing that was doomed to fail, a crash and burn as you say, not least because in ToD, they were both pissed and pissed off. But even though in my canon they didn't last much after that initial shag, I did think of them getting back together, maybe several times before finally coming out as a couple. This is a getting back together and Cormac is facing a few truths - not least that he drinks too much and really isn;t happy being this perceived womaniser.

I don't know why I've become more sympathetic to Zach. I do still think he's a tosser, but I don't believe he deserves such hate because of his 'cowardice'. There are worse things, imo. Yeah, he shouldn't have run ahead of the younger kids, but then again, he was the one who could have been made to fight.

Uhm ... I've lost my train of thought - ha ha. Just remembered, though, that Hamish McLaggen was supposed to have had a bigger part in this, so I might have to write something else for him. I hope you picked up on his wish to dress up as Harry Potter - ha ha. Made me giggle writing that.

Thank you for the stupendous review. I had a laugh and a cry writing this, so I appreciate you R & R'ing. ~Carole

Name: Indigo Cygnus (Signed) · Date: 02/22/14 12:12 · For: Chapter 4 - Winter Sun
Hi! I'l terrible with reviews, but I'm going to give this a try. I read it all in one sitting. I was going to read only the first chapter and leave the rest for later, but I was hooked! What I enjoyed the most were your characters. You really had a strong grasp on them. They were a delight to read, specially the Romilda and Cormac relationship. Congratulations!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for this review and I must apoilogise for the length of time it's taken me to respond. I see m to keep coming back to this pairing which I only meant to write once - ooops. Thanks again ~Carole.

Name: Dad (Signed) · Date: 12/23/13 11:54 · For: Chapter 4 - Winter Sun
That;s two people who had a happy Christmas. (It;s not real, you know).

Author's Response: Of course it's happening in your head, but what makes you think that's not real? :) Thank you. Yes, I think they had a happy Christmas and maybe a few more. ~Carole~

Name: Fynnsmom (Signed) · Date: 12/22/13 23:38 · For: Chapter 4 - Winter Sun
I sure did enjoy this story. The only problem is that I want it to be longer. Cormac did come up with a great solution to Zach's problems. What I liked best about this story was that the characters could've gone on with their sad little lives but they didn't. They took their futures into their own hands and molded them to get what they wanted. Inspirational.

Author's Response: Well, when all is said and done, Cormac is a Gryffindor so at some point he will always grab an opportunity. His problem is that he's been drinking too much, then sobering up and regretting it. It has taken them 2 years to get to this point, mainly because of Cormac's fear and then Zach's intransigence, but yes, they got there in the end ... or have they - Mwahahahaha. I promised myself I'd given up fanfiction, but somehow this couple wormed there way back in. Thank you ~Carole~

Name: Fynnsmom (Signed) · Date: 12/22/13 21:24 · For: Chapter 3 - Squalls and Tempests
It seems Ro had some good advice. I think Cormac needs to man up and say what's on his mind. But I guess we all need to be less cowardly and it's easy to give advice on being brave. I feel bad for both Cormac and Zach since they seem so unhappy. Is Ro really going to write a story about them? Does Zach's Dad have Alzheimer's? I'm really liking this story.

Author's Response: Romilda's not as awful as all that. Actually, I started off wanting to write her as a complete b**ch, but started to warm to her so I gave her some acid but a decent heart. You know about Zach's dad now ... :( Glad you liked the story ~Carole~

Name: Fynnsmom (Signed) · Date: 12/20/13 1:21 · For: Chapter 2 - Gathering Clouds
Oh no! I did chuckle at the appearance of Cormac. I wanted to know why Luis was there also. I kind of thought Luis was leading Zach on. Romilda is correct, no one should be sad at Christmas. I can understand why Cormac was annoyed with his Dad. I write grant proposals for my job and sometimes the grantors ask for so many edits I wonder why they don't just write it themselves.

Author's Response: I'm not sure if he'd have minded it being rewritten if he hadn't suspected the truth which is that his dad dislikes Smith because he's gay - sigh. Thanks for the review ~Carole~

Name: Fynnsmom (Signed) · Date: 12/20/13 1:00 · For: Chapter 1 - Stormy Weather
How horrible to be thought of as one of those who fled the Battle rather than stand to fight with Harry. I wonder what I would've done in the Battle. I'm in Ravenclaw so I probably would've strategized. :D. I really like that you choose some of the lesser known characters and weave stories around them. I think you can be a little more creative when doing that. Anyway, I always love reading your stories. I'm also jealous because Indon't write as fast.

Author's Response: I think what did it for Smith is that he raced out of Hogwarts ahead of the younger childre, but then again, if you were of age, you were more likely to be told to fight, so I don;t altogether blame him. (Well, I do, but I can see how terror made him run.).

Thanks for the review. ~Carole~

Name: Dad (Signed) · Date: 12/19/13 14:18 · For: Chapter 2 - Gathering Clouds
Interesting characters.

Author's Response: Thank you. I wrote about them in a story called Truth or Dare because someone dared me to write this pairing - ha ha. I'm more like Cormac than I thought possible. Thanks for the review. ~Carole~

Name: hestiajones (Signed) · Date: 12/18/13 8:41 · For: Chapter 1 - Stormy Weather
StayFocused can't c;#kblock me on the phone, bro. -cackles- I enjoyed this immensely and MY BODY IS READY FOR MORE.

'awards-stroke-ball' yeah, yeah, yeah.

Author's Response: It's taken me so long to reply I thought you were awarding me a 'stroke ball' and wondered just how far our relationship had progressed ... -snigger- .

I hope you enjoyed the rest of it and ... oh, yeah, you did. Hamish says 'Yo, wassup, bro!'

Thank youuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu MEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE

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