Reviews For A Dursley Lament
Reviewer: Daenerys_bella_girl
Date: 01/12/14 17:54
Chapter: A Dursley Lament

I love this topic! I've always wondered what would happen to the Dursleys after the war was over. I also like the flow of this- especially the last paragraph. There is one thing I found strange, though. You started the first two paragraphs with the character's name- Dudley and then Vernon. However, you didn't do the same with Petunia's paragraph. It seems a bit off balance, but maybe I'm just imagining it. Great job!

Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed this and I know what you mean about the poem feeling a bit disjointed because of it. Petunia is just different from the rest of her family: she's not concerned with herself so much, which is why I decided not to start the paragraph with her name. Thank you for your review!

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