Reading this was a rather lovely experience. The different scenes work to create this impressionistic sense of life being really quite difficult for Harry perfectly. Very poignant, at times painful!
Tense-wise, when I started to read I was sceptical, but as it progresses i felt that it was stylistically on the nail.
Wonderful writing. x
It was fantastic!! A bit rough on the last chapter, but I found it flowed well :-)
I still think it feels slightly unreal but almost hypnotic.
Just read this all at once, start to finish. Beautiful story. I've wondered the same thing, surely Harry would be haunted by everything that had happened to him. Nicely done.
This is a really interesting story. I really liked the fragmentary style of it and the way you showed Harry through these moments, though I'm not quite sure what I think about this being in anti-chronological order; I'm not sure if it adds anything exactly. It's not that I dislike it, I'm just not quite sure what effect it adds. I did like how even though you are in one moment you are aware of other points in time, particularly in this last chapter when the sections in brackets refer to the future, I think that's really effective in showing the overall effect of the war on Harry.
I think I liked the first chapter the best, it was very understated but Harry's past was simultaneously at the forefront. I also liked how it brought out more trauma from his neglectful childhood, particularly in connection with his own children. And yet Harry doesn't talk about it (as he rarely does in canon) so it is just constantly there. I liked how you played this out throughout the story, particularly in the scene with Petunia, and that was one (of the many) moments that made me tear up.
I also liked the chapter (the second I think?) when you referred to that compromise in Harry and Ginny's relationship. I think you showed their relationship really well; it wasn't disastrous or perfect as a lot of people seem to describe it in canon, it felt real given the lives the two of them have led.
I think you're right, the "all is well" at the end of the series isn't quite satisfying given the trauma many of the characters suffer. I liked how Harry could still appear fairly normal on the outside but those darknesses and shadows were constantly hovering in the corners.
I found the comparison between the Voldemort-baby and Harry's own children pretty disturbing and I'd certainly never thought of them as similar, but as you say in the fic, I guess that was a part of Harry and his children are.
I liked the ambiguity in this final chapter about what actually happened with Voldemort's body, it really shows Harry's mental state. I also liked how you explored Voldemort as a human/non-human through his body.
The story as a whole is a little confusing and ambiguous, I do understand that this is sort of the point, but I wonder if you could have drawn things out a bit more. I'm not quite sure about the ending; I get the idea that Ron and Hermione are feeling happy and Harry isn't really, but I found that last line didn't tie in exactly to the whole story. Maybe I just don't really get it.
Anyway I did really like this story. Your writing is incredibly effective and as I've said I was moved to tears a few times. I really like your exploration of Harry's inner psychology and I think it works really well with canon, I guess I'd just like you to draw it out more. But really really great work, I hope you get more reviews for this it really deserves it!
Author's Response: Thank you for your lovely review! I really struggled trying to balance this story, particuarly the line between the ureal/fragmentedness and having the story still feel coherent. The points you've brought up are definitely the parts I was aware of being weaker! I think this is a fic I will probably come back to in a few years when I'm a but less attached to it and do a rewrite, but I'm glad you enjoyed it even so. :)
I thought it felt a bit unreal, but I look forward to more.
Author's Response: Thank you! I hope you've enhoyed the later chapters as well. :)
I like this. I don't read much next gen, but I think the kids are interesting here, almost as interesting as Harry. I will definitely be watching for the next installment. Happy writing.
Author's Response: Thank you! I've put this in Post-Hogwarts rather than Next-Gen because the kids aren't really going to be in it much after this chapter and the focus will be on Harry. However, having a chance to play around with their personalities here has made me think about writing a next gen story or two, which I've not been interested in before. The next few chapters should come along fairly swiftly - they are most written, just need a bit of editing and tweaking in places. Thanks for reviewing, I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)