Reviewer: Oregonian
Date: 04/16/14 16:59
Chapter: And I Feel Fine

Hi, Leah,

This is Vicki of Slytherin House commenting on your crazily marvelous poem. It’s clever, flippant, tongue-in-cheek. I loved it. It reminded me of Peeves’ silly doggerel after Voldemort was defeated in the last chapter of Deathly Hallows. We could say that your poem is the Cliff’s Notes version of Deathly Hallows in six hundred words.

You have many good lines in this piece. My favorite is ”Neville slices up the snake, this is Chosen One’s big break”. Sometimes your poem rhymes, or sort-of rhymes, or doesn’t rhyme at all. The rhymes pop up at unpredictable intervals, at ends of lines or within a single line. I find myself thinking that maybe you have a future in rap. I would have liked to see even a few more rhymes, in the usual custom of rappers, but it was lots of fun just the way it was.

In case we were ever inclined to take the Harry Potter series more seriously than we should, as if it were some sort of profound pronouncement, your poem will bring us all back to our senses. I hope you will continue to write because I’m sure we will all enjoy whatever you produce.

Good job :)

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