I love this story! It was great how you centered the story around the one class. I really felt like I was getting to know the characters, by what they said and did. Teddy is such a solid character, and it's very easy to imagine him getting the students excited- about anything really. It's very sweet. :)
I really enjoyed this story. It's nice to read a story about teaching and how teachers interact with students, and how having a really good teacher can make anything interesting. I totally get Teddy's response at the end, since I'm currently studying to be a teacher too. I also think Remus Lupin is probably the best teacher we ever see in canon, so it was a nice touch that his son is equally good and becomes not only an excellent teacher but a mentor for his students.
I particularly liked the storyline with James - firstly it was nice to read a James who wasn't an exact replica of his namesake (clever, pranking, good at Quidditch, popular, a bit cocky etc), but instead thoughtful, nervous about his opinions (thought not unconfident) and very hardworking to try and live up to his family. I liked how it was Teddy who really helped him find his strength and see that there was something he could do.
I enjoyed the way you set up the classroom dynamic and showed the change over the year amongst the seventh years. I was amused by Neil and particularly his Macbeth costume, but they did make a nice balanced class. I'm curious as to why you chose not to have any girls though, I wouldn't have thought of history as a particularly male-dominated field. Also I think early on you mention a Slytherin called Charlie, but when you list the whole class there is no Charlie... just a small thing you might want to fix up.
I enjoyed your mingling of Muggle and wizarding history, I thought that was very creative and worked well in the story. I liked this line: and it’d give them time to detox from his class before he started giving review assignments on the wars with Voldemort. Those were crucial, a true test of whether or not they could debate points without personal bias. I would have liked to see some of the class actually talk about this, because I think you're right, it be very easy to be biased especially with James in the class. I just think it would have showed an interesting side to the post-war world.
Generally I liked your writing, the story flows nicely and the dialogue works well for developing the characters. You got the classroom atmosphere in perfectly, and I liked the change from the dead quiet room at the beginning to the free-flowing discussion/debate at the end. At times I thought you overwrote a bit, like the ending, I don't think you need the last line "And then, he knew his answer", because that is obvious from the previous line ("maybe he loved being a history teacher"). Another example just before that is when you've written "And so Teddy thought. / He thought it was etc" - I think you don't need the first line.
Anyway that didn't take away from my enjoyment of the story; I liked this because both the storyline and characters were different from what we often see.
Love this - awesome to read about the life and times of grown-up Teddy Lupin which aren't solely based on romance :)
I've just read this story, and liking history myself it resonates a bit with me. I think that the flow it very well in this story. And YEARH(!) you've managed a happy, nice story.
I loved the story. It is so amazing. I just wished I was there. It had me laughing a couple of times but I felt sad near the end. I could really feel ted's energy. Such a good story. I wish there was more.
Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked it! I tried to put a few jokes in there, and I'm sorry the sad bit continued into the last part of the piece. I kind of wish there was more, too. Thank you so much for the lovely review!
Not a thing I would have ever expected Teddy Lupin to do, but you made him a great history teacher.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I'm glad you liked him as a teacher.
Hi, Ellie. It is an honor to be the first person to write a review for this fine story by a member of my House. After I had read about a quarter of the way down the page, I had to scroll back to the top and make sure I wasn't dreaming -- the story is that good! Did I see the author's name correctly? Is this really Ellie? Your writing has improved astonishingly from the days of your very first stories. I always enjoyed them, lively and imaginative, but your skill in writing is improving by leaps and bounds.
What do I like about this story? The writing is so smooth and fluid. The narrative just flows, the sentences are well crafted, and nothing seems awkward or juvenile. With my editorial blue pencil in hand, I can't see any places to circle or underline.
The story is very tight. There's no wayward straying into off-the-topic matters, no bantering dialogue that serves no purpose, nothing that dilutes the focus or makes us doubt what the point is.
Thank you, thank you for treating Teddy, James, and the other students with as much seriousness and respect as you did. No hunky heart-throb with kaleidoscopic hair colors here! No wisecracking teaser here! You have rejected the tiresome stereotypes to show us characters with depth, wisdom, and real challenges, people who learn and grow and change.
Your story is meaty, the way I like stories, because the topics are serious -- an in-depth analysis of an historic era (clever how you meld Muggle and magical history) and a crisis of life choices, well couched in a lot of supporting details and giving us a vivid look into the prime function of Hogwarts -- the teaching (easy to forget about amongst endless scenes of people sneaking around the castle at night, hidden under an invisibility cloak and seeking adventures!)
My only suggestion: look back at the line "It crashed through Headmaster Sprout's window," and consider changing Headmaster to Headmistress. (We are talking about Pomona Sprout, aren't we?)
I really don't know how you find the time to do all you do and still manage to produce such great writing. It is a pleasure to read it.
Author's Response: Vicki!!!! It has taken far too long to respond to this, but I keep blushing and not finding words every time I try. If I'm being honest, this fic was going to remain a plot bunny at the back of my head forever, but Maple convinced me to write it. I didn't know that you read my first works, but I am beyond the point of blushing right now; it's amazing to hear that some of my work may have payed off. I definitely tried to keep it on focus, but there were certain things I had to squish in there for my own benefit (the 'if you're f**ked and you know it clap your hands' bit, to be specific).
On Teddy and James: I have found that the more I think about those characters, the more I wish J.K. elaborated on the epilogue. I feel like James would be under so much pressure (being the first born of 'The Chosen One' and all), and I think the prank thing would taper off rather quickly. Teddy, well, I think with the combination of Remus and Tonks in him, he'd be one sassy, but extremely intelligent person. I am so glad that you liked them.
Last year in school I had quite a different history class. We only covered from the big bang through the Black Plague, and we honestly did most of the teaching ourselves. Rome was a major topic, and as I'm a total math and architecture geek, I was drawn to the Pantheon. And then I thought about including it with wizardry - what if all the amazing architecture was aided by magic? I also kind of wanted to include normal, human things that every student goes through, especially if they're applying places.
Basically, I am beyond thrilled you enjoyed it and thank you for pointing out that niggle!