Reviews For Turn to Stone
Reviewer: Ginny Weasley Potter
Date: 08/16/13 13:44
Chapter: (let's take a better look beyond a storybook)

Hey, Ellie!

I saw a few days ago that you had posted this, and was intrigued, but when I read the summary before opening the link to the story today, I was even more intrigued. The truth is, I don’t think I’ve ever read such a story, or even such a concept before. It was so poignant, sweet and magical. I really, really enjoyed it.

Let me begin with the writing style. Your whole method ” all your sentence structures, and everything, they resonated with a magical sensation inside me. I’m repeating myself, I know, but there is something surreal and transcendent about the way you’ve handled this. I’ve read a few of your stories, and you tend to lean more heavily on emotion, but this was full of description. You concentrated on creating an atmosphere ” a premise for wonder. It was almost poetic, and it didn’t have much dialogue, so it was rather silent, and yet the story spoke about a lot.

Your descriptive writing was lovely too. The way you’ve written about the statues, stating every feature, expressing everything about them, I could imagine it all. When they transformed to humans, especially, I was very fond of how you wrote. It starts at the very tips of her fingers; they soften and gain human wrinkles as they darkenThis would be my favourite line in the entire story, because I saw it ” her skin darkening, the creases along her palm forming, the tiny lines on her skin making themselves evident, clothes and hair falling loose… it was a majestically written portion, really. I can’t see her, I don’t know what she looks like, but her description made her look beautiful, and by now, just like the male statue, I was also eager to have a glance at this woman.

The male statue, on that account, was wonderfully written. His feelings and thoughts have been well-expressed, and I loved how they always seemed to circle the other statue. Also, I love how much both the statues (and I shall call them Colin and Luna, since that’s what they named themselves later on) seemed to observe everything around them. But I reckon that’s what a statue could do, after all. The naming was also apt ” poignant, because the statues would never find out what happened to Colin Creevey. I’m not surprised that Luna spoke to her namesake, and I find that single line a wonderful way to express Luna Lovegood’s character.

The romantic overtones in the story were subtle and well-done. I enjoyed how it all lay on how much Colin and Luna observed each other. I loved reading about the wonderfulness of feeling grass for the first time and looking at the stars. The kiss too was coming and was well-placed. It was sweet and sexy, and I loved that particular moment.

Of course, I was very sad when Colin and Luna had to go back to being statues, but I liked the lesson we learned from this story. The whole Harry Potter series stresses on how death is an essential once we get life, and this one proves it. I loved how you expressed that eternity seems lovely when you look at it from the pained eyes of having watched death, but in actuality, it is better that we are the way we are.

Your story gave me a lot to think about, and my day is ending on a very bittersweet, positive note. I definitely loved this, and will be keeping it in mind for the QSQs next year. Lovely story. Well done! :)

Pooja

Author's Response: Pooja!!!!! I honestly haven't been able to respond to this review because I haven't been able to find words. I know it was an honestly weird idea, and I'm glad I didn't scare you off, lol.

I'm thrilled that you loved the writing style. I was definitely trying to write more descriptively, because the piece felt more of doing than saying, and for me that's always been a challenge. THe moment you mention, when 'Luna' starts to change - that was the most vivid moment I could see in my head when writing it, and I'm amazed that it carried over. Also, I wanted to stay more away from dialogue simply because I wasn't sure exactly how much they knew, how much they would be able to talk about. I had to think about what it would be reasonable for them to hear about in everyday conversation of Hogwart's students, what they could connect words and ideas to, and by that reasoning I had to take 'stars' out of their language.

In my head, these statues were made either just as or right after Hogwarts was. They've only ever 'seen' that one corner of the castle, and after a thousand years (literally) of only having that limited range of vision, I felt he would know every detail like the back of his hand. When I decided they were going to name themselves, and that they would be Hogwart's students' names, only two recognizable characters came to mind. Colin, because he was always a bit of a loner and would love the opportunity to photograph them, and Luna, because she would read into their stance. I feel like she would talk to the statues, and so Colin and Luna became their names. :)

The romance was because I honestly couldn't picture two people who've been stuck with each other for such a long time, without knowing who the other is, who wouldn't fall in love with each other. He spent so much time just staring at her, memorizing every detail, and she could only wonder what he looked like. I'm also glad you enjoyed the kiss. :) And as much as I would love to, I couldn't keep them human forever, because they weren't. I think that art and humans are envious of each other; humans because they want to be that immortalized beauty, that no one will forget and it will never die, but the art because they want to feel like the humans do, and don't want to be stuck there forever. It just seemed to fit, and I'm glad that that point made it's way across.

Honestly, I'm sitting here grinning like an idiot at this review. I am so unbelievably glad that you enjoyed it, and just thank you for reading and leaving such an amazing review.

Ellie

Reviewer: Theloonyhermione
Date: 08/15/13 21:03
Chapter: (let's take a better look beyond a storybook)

This was so adorable and sad and cute and sweet at the same time... aww :')

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I'm so glad you enjoyed reading it. :)

Ellie

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 08/13/13 6:20
Chapter: (let's take a better look beyond a storybook)

A very different story.

Author's Response: Thanks. :) I know it was a bit odd, but in my defense I did write it at roughly two in the morning. Thanks for the review!

Ellie

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