Reviews For Outside Looking In
Reviewer: socks2
Date: 01/24/14 7:11
Chapter: one-shot

Wow, very interesting perspective! Never thought of it that way before.

Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione
Date: 07/18/13 4:07
Chapter: one-shot

This was a really interesting story and I think you really captured that unique position that Ginny is in, closer to the trio than anyone but still not part of them. I think you really showed the emotions this makes her feel, even when she feels bad for feeling left out. I also liked the idea that when she is finally with Harry in HBP that she is hoping to finally be let in on the secrets - but it doesn't happen then, or ever really. She's always longing for more until at the end she is satisfied with where she is.

I also think you handled Ginny's character well, from the shy girl we first meet to the strong girl at the end, and I liked how you drew on her being the youngest and connected it to not being included with the trio (eg when her mother tells her she is 'too young' for something).

I adored this line - "I just can't sleep without them in the same room," she explains quietly the next morning when asked about it. "I have to know they're okay. You understand?"

She nods, but she doesn't. After all, she has spent nine months sleeping without knowing where they were or if they were alive.
I think that just shows how much Ginny has had to cope with, but everyone is focussed on the trials of the trio. It also just shows how she's not part of what they have.

I liked the idea of the "back-up trio", I thought maybe you could have made reference to the understanding between Ginny, Neville and Luna - I know this is supposed to be focussed on the trio, so I know why you didn't, I just thought it might add to it because in my mind Ginny has a strong bond with them.

There are just a few times where you change tense, like the ending line "That was fine with her" suddenly in past tense. To me it would flow better if they stayed in present tense. Just a small comment.

I also think you captured the trio really well, particularly in the relationship between Harry and Hermione at the end and how platonic that is but how they need each other for comfort, not other people (does that make sense?).

Anyway I loved this story, it is a bit bittersweet and beautifully written and characterised.

~Katrina

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! I'm really glad you enjoyed it. Yeah, I've read a few fics where Ginny becomes one of the trio but that never seemed right to me. Those three went through so much together that it makes sense that they would become reliant on one another and quite insular. Not on purpose though because they all obviously love Ginny, it's just that she wasn't there. Her being the youngest and only girl in the family probably added to it - I know my own little sister always wanted to be involved with stuff anyway! Gah, I knew there would still be some tense issues. I couldn't decide which tense to have it in so I re-wrote this several times to change it so a few were bound to be wrong. Thanks for pointing them out! And finally, I'm glad you enjoyed the Harry/Hermione interaction. I love their friendship so it's nice to hear. Thanks again for the lovely review :)

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 07/01/13 17:39
Chapter: one-shot

Well written but I found it slightly sad.

Author's Response: It is a bit on the bittersweet side of things, isn't it? Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: kheldar
Date: 06/30/13 1:09
Chapter: one-shot

Wonderful, as always. I seem to think that this was the first fic of your I read over on FF.net, and suffice it to say that this was the gateway drug to your other stuff, because I'm hooked.

Author's Response: This was the first fic I ever completed so that is oddly fitting. Haha, you make it sound like drugs or something. Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: Ruchira_M
Date: 06/28/13 14:21
Chapter: one-shot

Interesting take. Liked it.

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I'm glad you liked it :)

Reviewer: Snorkack
Date: 06/28/13 13:28
Chapter: one-shot

Brilliant as always, hope you write a lot more!!

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing and saying nice things! I will try not to disappoint you in the future!

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