Reviewer: minnabird
Date: 07/27/13 8:37
Chapter: Winter at the Castle

This is a gorgeous poem. I love a good, consistent rhythm like this, and it seems effortless in many of the verses (the fifth verse gave me pause for a moment, but I see now it adheres to a certain rhythm within the verse). I love the imagery as well - I can picture this winter perfectly, even though I've never lived through such a winter. Also, I think the old-fashioned language lends a sort of reverence that's fitting to the poem as a whole. Beautiful work.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review. ("Gorgeous" is a pretty extravagant word!) It's nice to know that rhythm and rhyme are not too old-fashioned. I too like a good rhythm, and I guess I read a fair amount of poetry of the last century, or earlier, because the language sounds perfectly normal to me, not really old-fashioned or archaic. I too have never spent a winter in Scotland, but I thought of winters in Alaska and Finland, and figured it must be about the same. Good to hear from you!

Reviewer: 1000timesingoldenink
Date: 06/04/13 22:00
Chapter: Winter at the Castle

Wow! This is a terrific poem, and I'm sorry I'm not going to leave a length crit...I love your wording; the language seems so archaic and pretty, and your rhyming and meter is just perfect.

Glad to see you've joined PA. You should really write more poetry!:)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review. This is the kind of stuff I usually write, but I see that PA encourages/teaches us to write in many different styles, so there will be something to learn.

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