I didn't realize at first, I thought it was flashbacks, but I love this sort of layout, going backwards. Great job!!
This was a very emotional story, but also one that I really liked because it was so sweet even though it ultimately was so sad.
The time-line works very well, you have avoided leaving your audience crying buckets at the end - I didn't at least. It ended on a sweet note, which was more postive than if the time-line had been chronological. Nice story.
Author's Response: Thank you (once again) for reading and reviewing. I was trying to avoid the tears this time, correct, and I'm glad it worked. I just loved the idea of it ending where it should've begun. Thanks again!
Poor Albus...and Sophia...:'(
I like how you had the painful emotions right in the beginning, where the sweet/simple/non-painful stuff was at the end. It is very much the reverse of what usually happens, and it changes the dynamic of what the story would have been otherwise, because instead of apprehension for the troubles the reader knows will probably come, the reader is told of the troubles right away and then is left with a sadness in reading about the characters' earlier, happier times...sort of reverse catharsis. I really enjoyed it!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I don't know why, but as soon as I got the idea I knew it would have to be in reverse chronologically. Just because my stories generally go on a downward spiral very quickly, and I wanted it to look up for once. I'm glad you really enjoyed it, and I love the idea of a reverse catharsis.
I enjoyed the convoluted storyline...working back to the beginning. Perhaps you might consider another A/S installment highlighting the events surrounding Al's magical revelation and Sophia's interactions with the Potters?
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I'm not sure I'll write more of Al/Sophia's story - the main gist of their revelation is that when they both wake up one morning, Al realizes he loves her and decides to tell her. Sophia responds with "okay, cool, you're a wizard. What do you want for breakfast?" And then Al proposes he's so happy. I'm glad you liked it. :)
That was really beautiful. Your writing is equisite - I love how we start backwards. Maybe you could flashback though at the end to Albus & James going to the funeral at the end? It would just resolve it a little. But great overall anyway :)
Author's Response: I'm blushing right now. I'm so glad you enjoyed it; I was worried about how the backwards timeline would go. I don't think I'd want to have them going to the funeral, mostly because I really don't think I could cause Al anymore pain in this. I just kind of liked the idea of it ending with them saying their names. It made me think how innocent it was, and how it could have been nothing if he'd just continued on the street. Thank you so much for the review!
It hurt to read this at the beginning so I am glad you used the time line you did. Well written.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I was hoping the timeline would lessen the blow. :)
Hi, Ellie =)
Yeah, Al is the one who puts his characters through hell =P I begin to doubt that he's your favourite character with the amount you put him through in your various fics! Anyway, I love this. Sophia is very nicely characterised, and I love the dynamic between her and Al. Even though we only see her through snippets of her life, she is very well rounded and fleshed out as a character and I would love to see more of her. I was getting progressively sadder as the piece went on because I kept thinking about how cute they are together and half expected to read about them getting married and growing old together, but then I would have to remind myself that that couldn't be the case. I thought your reasoning behind the fact that even the wizarding world didn't have a cure was an interesting one, and it's something I'd never thought of before and yet it makes perfect sense.
This is no where near the standard of the lovely review you gave my fic, but I just had to say something about this piece. I really enjoyed it =)
Author's Response: Abiiiiii! Thank you so much for the squee-worthy review! I love Al, and it's because I love him that I'm able to put him through such bad things. If I didn't 'know' him so well I'd feel bad about it. :) I'm glad you like Sophia, even though we only see a bit of her. I had hoped that by writing it backwards it might be a little more uplifting, but I guess it can add to the crushing angst of a normal Ellie!story and I'll be happy with it. :) I had to think through the cancer aspect, so I decided to go with they have funky DNA, and therefore no need to cure it. Your review was lovely and it made my day. You should join SPEW!