I think you very accurately caught Hermione here. We only see Harry's POV after Ron leaves, and he, of course, never mentions Ron to her. (Boys!) But she must have been going through such hell.
I particularly like the images of water here because she was trying so hard to keep the tears at bay during the day, and yet Harry heard her crying at night.
Well done. Heart rending poem. ~Carole~
Author's Response: Thanks, I'm really glad you thought I captured Hermione's voice right, and liked all the water references. As for Harry and her not discussing Ron, I kind of think if they had, he would've said something stupid and just her further. Thanks for the review; glad you enjoyed the poem!
Wow! :) This was so dramatic, but in a good way. I really liked your direct tone, which felt very Hermione-ish to me. Great job!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!