This is Vicki, your Slytherin housemate. I am reading your old stuff tonight and having a good time.
This is an interesting poem, and an interesting subject. You suggest that the merpeople know about Voldemort, have been watching him somehow, and know that he is evil, but they also perceive that, so far, he doesn’t pay any attention to them because they have no value to him. In his pursuit of world domination, he has failed to think about the creatures under the water, or if he does momentarily think about them, he believes that they are weak, unable to resist him.
But, say the merpeople, they will eventually prove him wrong. Your poem suggest that they will not enter the battle of their own volition, as did many non-human species at the Battle of Hogwarts; the merpeople will fight only if they are directly threatened. “If he ever comes below, he’ll hear our battle cry.” I wonder if this means that they would fight only to protect their own self-interest, or that they could fight only if he came to them in their watery kingdom because they cannot leave it.
It’s a compact, neat little poem, easy to understand. The rhyme is not totally consistent in the fourth verse, but that doesn’t matter. It has a freshness and a unique point of view. I enjoyed reading it.
Author's Response: Hi Vicki, It was a rather strange subject to write about! It was for a poetry exchange, so I had to go with the prompt. It took a very long time to figure out what I was going to write, that's for sure! As is often in the books, Voldemort tend to underestimate magical creatures such as house elves. He would never really pay attention to the merpeople, because he thinks they pose no threat. The merpeople, on the other hand, know how evil he is, and have decided that if ever threatened, they will fight back as hard as they can. They don't particularly care, however, about whatever else Voldemort does as long as it does not affect them directly. I'm glad you liked it! -Georgia