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Reviews For A Year Tomorrow

Name: WeasleyMom (Signed) · Date: 05/12/14 21:04 · For: Something Worth Celebrating
I enjoyed this story very much. You mentioned in your notes a concern that some things may be underdeveloped, but I didn't get that feeling at all. We may have only got bits of information about each family member, but I think the characterization is still very good. Harry is described as thin, but not as much as he was before. Ron is anxious about the party. Charlie's trying to help. And George is leaning on Ginny (while making it look like it's the other way around). It all seems right. George in particular, was well done. He's working and functioning, but we can see he isn't good. Arhur mentions that George's intention to attend the party at all "is enough," and that made me wonder how he was really doing. I wanted more of him, but that's more to do with my own interest in the character than in anything to do with the writing.

I noticed some of your reviews mention wanting more of Molly, particularly at the end of the piece. I am a huge fan of the character, so more is always better, and yet, I felt completely satisfied with the way you wrote her here. We see her doing her daily routine as best she can (the eggs), planning the party, serving breakfast, having a cry out, and finally, straightening herself and moving forward with the party. And then we see her through Arthur's eyes, enjoying her new grandchild so much that she's smiling and enjoying herself, and the message to the reader in that image is that she is okay. At least right now, with that baby in her arms, she is finding joy and healing, and I was quite satisfied with that being my last glimpse of her in this fic. Because the point is... she isn't the only one who is struggling. Arthur has been bearing it in silence, having not wanted the party at all, and at this point, I think the focus of the story moves to finding resolution for him.

By way of constructive criticism, I do think the fic could do with a quick edit. There were some errors, one right up front that made me stumble... all easily fixed, I think. And there were a couple of things that struck me as a little odd. For example, why would Arthur have intended to hide Percy's letter from Molly? Things are presumably much better between him and the family and I can't imagine Molly would be anything but thrilled to meet the girl he's seeing. I did wonder about that. Also, why would Hermione be concerned about drinking Butterbeer before her finals? They drank it on Hogsmeade weekends, and I think the alcohol content is little to none. Again, just something that gave me pause. These are niggly little things, and they certainly didn't hamper my enjoyment of the fic.

The real beauty in what you've created here is the portrayal of grief, in so many characters, but particularly in Molly and Arthur. Grief doesn't make a lot of sense, and people trying to move under its weight do contradictory things... like Molly planning the party, then having a cry over her second thoughts, and then buckling down to go on and have it. She likely didn't think it through before she planned it, but in the end, I think it was probably a big help to her. I have to wonder, though, in true pessimist fashion, if the quiet that settled in on her after everyone went back to where they'd come from was even more brutal than what she had known before. Grief really defies explanation, and I think you captured that beautifully in this glimpse of the family, particularly Molly.

Name: HPAlison (Signed) · Date: 03/17/13 23:26 · For: Something Worth Celebrating
Fabulous story! So bittersweet. Actually made me tear up a little. Too much loss. I thought you did a great job of capturing the characters' grief in only a few words. I'd love to see you expand on the characters in future stories - especially George and Andromeda.

Name: shewolf2000 (Signed) · Date: 03/17/13 22:19 · For: Something Worth Celebrating
I really liked it, but the ending was rather abrupt. I love Harry and Teddy, but I think it would feel more complete if you ended it back with Molly, rather than giving Andromeda the last word. Just an idea. Otherwise very good.

Name: baby54boomer (Signed) · Date: 03/17/13 18:37 · For: Something Worth Celebrating
So many different storylines you could persue from this narrative...perhaps you won't mind if someone else picks them up and develops them in future???

Actually, this is a very nice sketch, revealing heart-felt emotions in various stages of healing. Good job to you!

Name: Snorkack (Signed) · Date: 03/17/13 16:48 · For: Something Worth Celebrating
This is a lovely story, so sad, but still with a bit of hope, Arthur is one of my favourite characters and I think you characterised him very well. I had never read any of your fics before, but I will now! Keep up the good work!

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