This in combination with the Hermione chapter in Nineteen days later is heartbreaking
I like how you fill in the missing moments that we would love to hear about. The character is so true to the Hermione we know, I wish we could have seen how she got her Hogwarts letter,her and her parents reaction to that.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing again! I'm pleased that liked my little Hermione. She was a lot of fun to write even though she was upset. I'm not sure if I'll ever write her getting the letter but it would be really cool if JKR could give us the story on Pottermore or something like that. Her family life is left a bit of a mystery.
Hello there! I'm Georgia. I read your story and really enjoyed it immensely. It's rare for people to write a story about Hermione's childhood, so it was quite nice to see this one. Your characterization was excellent and Hermioen seemed like a younger version of how she is at Hogwarts.
I really liked how you made Hermione and her dad be so much alike. It reinforces the idea in DH of Hermione willing to do whatever it takes to protect her parents. She does seem a bit younger than ten though, more like she's eight or nine instead of going on eleven. I also liked the interaction you had between the parents at the beginning. It shows how they have to deal with this so often, but they really have no clue what they're doing. The dread they have for the task of comforting Hermione seemed so realistic, especially as it all baffled them so much.
As I stated before, I like how Hermione is just a younger version of herself. Her love of learning and books was a great backdrop to how she is in later year. I especially liked the part where you say she was perfectly content to just sit and read at school instead of play with the other children. I also liked how her magical abilities were so strong even though she was very young. Her parents didn't quite seem to realize the danger it posed though. For example, didn't they realize that if Hermione could take the hair off a doll that she could also do that to a person? I'm not sure if even Muggle's would be that unobservant. One small thing I quite liked was how you said that Ben was ignoring the lamp that was flickering. It shows how the Grangers are getting used to the "incidents." You illustrated this nicely also when he took off Hermione's jumper so she wouldn't get so hot.
Your punctuation and the like was perfect! That is simply amazing to me. I noticed though that in the beginning you used the teacher's name, but later on you just call her the head teacher. I'm wondering if they're two different people in reality.
I really enjoyed this story. Keep up the good work. I hope to read more stories from you in the near future.
Author's Response: Hello! I'm really glad you liked my fic! Hermione's life before Hogwarts is fascinating to me so it was fun writing this even though it was a bit on the sad side. I think Hermione would have been close to her parents when she was younger and she clearly still cares about them later in dh. It was hard to get the age right but I guess when you're upset and having a cuddle with your dad you end up acting a bit younger, don't you? I think her abilities could have been dangerous (we saw that with Tom Riddle) but had Hermione's accidental magic be more like Harry's because neither of them are mean people. They would lash out when angry but I don't they could hurt someone, whereas Tom Riddle did. Yeah, I was trying to show that these incidents were almost becoming normal now and that knew it was Hermione but still had no idea what was going on. Thank you for grammar compliments! I don't know if it's perfect though, haha! Miss Mason and the headmistress are indeed the same person and that probably wasn't the Grangers' last meeting with her. So yes, thank you very much for the lovely! I hope you enjoy more of my fics :)
I love dramatic irony, and this story fits it so perfectly. :) I want to reach out to the characters and tell them that I know what is happening!!!!!! I really wonder what exactly a parent would feel when they found out their child was magical. I wonder how I would react...
Anyways, this was a cute story and I loved the interaction between father and daughter. Very nice!
Author's Response: Thank you for reading and reviewing! Yeah, I think without knowing that it all turns out okay in the end this story would have been very sad indeed. I guess as a kid you'd be more accepting of things like magic, but as an adult it would seem crazy. Although if my kid was magic the overwhelming emotion would be jealousy! Thank you :) I'm glad you enjoyed it!
This was just beautiful. :) Great job.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it :)
Lovely story. You brought out how hard it must be for muggle-borns, and especially someone as logical and reasonable as Hermione who likes to find answers.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing! Yeah, like most kids are more accepting of weird stuff because that's how kids are, but for someone like Hermione who, like you said, loves knowing exactly what is going on, it must have been pretty difficult.
You've constructed a very thoughtful, tender story of Hermione's relationship with her dad centered around the emerging magic we've all come to love about her. I wish you would have taken the story further, providing the conclusive meeting with Professor McGonigal and subsequent resolve to Hermione's quest to know "why." That being said, this brief look into Hermione's heart-wrenching pre-Hogwarts days stands alone as a reminder that no one is without personal doubt on the cusp of potential greatness! Good job.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing! Yeah, the story would have had much more fulfilling ending if there was something like that, haha. I might write something along those lines in the future though, to put poor little Hermione out of her misery. But yeah, thanks again for reviewing :)
Very good. It might be nice to do a follow through story at Christmas time in her first year at Hogwarts.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing! I'm glad you liked it! I might do some kind of follow up story, possibly that Christmas or her receiving her letter, just so there's a happy ending to this other than everyone just knowing it turns out all right anyway. Thanks again for the review :)
Oh, how sad and touching. Really makes you wonder why Dumbledore or someone didn;t visit them before so they could be assured their child was normal :(
Lovely story. I really liked the characterisation of both Hermione and Ben here, and you caught the father an daughter dynamic so perfectly. The phrase 'dear old dad' really caught at me because it's what my dad used to say to me.
Well done on a lovely story. ~Carole~
Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! I kinda hope after the war with the world being more Muggle friendly they would bring something in like that so this type of thing doesn't happen. Most kids would likely not be too worried, but for Hermione and her love of reason and logic it was probably harder. I'm really glad that you liked the dynamic between the two of them because that was quite difficult to write. Anyway, thank you again for reading!