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Reviewer: 1000timesingoldenink
Date: 03/05/13 18:17
Chapter: Lost

Hi Georgia! This is nice for a first poem. It flows well, and the ending--"I will keep watching, I will keep waiting. It will come back, I know it will" is a little bittersweet. The poem is very...what's the word...stark, which makes it seem more urgent. Just one crit--I do think it could use a little more description; a few more adverbs/adjectives would add to the feeling.

Looking forward to more poetry of yours!

Oh yeah, by the way, sorry for giving you a heart attack with that poetry duel thing...You did a good job there too :) Actually I guess I'm not sorry...

Reviewer: Nagini Riddle
Date: 03/05/13 8:46
Chapter: Lost

I think you have a very good start for your first poem. :) I like the simplicity of it that allows the emotion to really shine.

I only wish that last stanza was a little longer and more complete. Perhaps with a message to tie it all in. Perhaps like, "Til then I'll keep waiting,/Endlessly waiting for what I seek."

Other than that, very nice. I look forward to more poetry from you.

~Nagini Riddle

Author's Response: Thanks Nagini. I did add a few lines now. I agree, it did need a little more at the end. -Georgia

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