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Name: sarah31o (Signed) · Date: 09/10/13 22:37 · For: For Real?
nooooooo! hate unhappy endingss asdfhjkl

Author's Response: Aww, sorry about that, and thank you for reviewing! :)

Name: Gmariam (Signed) · Date: 04/02/13 20:39 · For: For Real?
Here I am after reading your Scorpius/Rose story! I was curious about Hugo and wanted to see how he turned out here. And I quite like him here. Now I understand all those LS statuses about how cruel you are to poor Hugo Weasley, lol. But more importantly, he really matured from who he was in UtS, where he was such a jerk to Malfoy, to here, where we got to see the other side of him, the side that cared about Annie.
I really enjoyed this. It's a tough read, but it was well-done, because this sort of thing happens in real life, but we don't see much of it in fanfiction. It's sad, more than anything - for Hugo and for Annie.
First watching Hugo lose his best friend was hard. Watching him realize she was being abused, and then getting the crap beat out of him himself, was awful. I mean, gah. He tried to help and he got kicked in the stomach - and Annie went right back to Grey! So sad.
The scene in the dormitory was wonderful. I really liked it. I loved how he just up and kissed her, even though she certainly could have taken it the wrong way. But she didn't. She crept into bed with him and for one night at least, he loved her. And then it went to hell the next day. So, so sad.
I really felt for them both by the end. I understood it was not a car accident that had brought her to the A&E. When Hugo ran into Grey afterward, I think I actually said *out loud* PUNCH HIM! I do the same with television shows, lol. And he did, because Grey deserved it.
Loved the reference to the title in those last lines. So, so sad. Great job with this tough story. Do you have anything happy for Hugo? ;)
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Yayy! So glad you took the time to read this, because this fic is the reason I haven't written anything in almost 40 days! Massive burn-out there :( . Well, to be fair, this does take place two years after UtS, so I reckon he'd have to be mature. But I wrote this first, so yeah, UtS had an immature version of him. :p This fic was tough to write. It was intense, and emotional, and I was drained out by the time I got to this. It was just so hard to write it correctly, and I really needed Soraya's prods to make it like it is. And this definitely happens in real life, which is really sad. :(

Ah, I've now been punched on the stomach several times, and it ain't fun at all. No sir. It's the most awful thing, and that just made me hate Annie so much more. I really disliked writing her, because she's the kind of person I'd hate to be like -- she's so silly and vulnerable and just... I can't stand her, and I do wish she'd just have stood up for herself, really. The dormitory scene was where Hugo had his chance to let Annie know of his feelings. I think at this point, he'd be quite uncaring of the consequences of kissing Annie.

I am so glad you liked it, and that it touched you. And Grey should go to hell. :/ Thank you for the review! I still have one to respond to, and will do it tomorrow. :) Thank you! :)

Name: J-Holly (Signed) · Date: 03/27/13 10:05 · For: For Real?
It's so sad, how it ended just like that. And I do wish the end was more... I don't know ... natural? It's sad and horrible and everything, and the way he punched Grey was so awesome, but I do wish there was more to the story.

Author's Response: Hello, and thank you for your review! :)

About the way this ends -- my honest thoughts were that an explanation, or a more complete ending would take away the feel of the story. I just wanted to show how Hugo has actually given up on Annie, if you see what I mean. The story after this is open to interpretation, really, though I might write a sequel if it beckons. :)

Name: Emmasbiggestfan (Signed) · Date: 03/04/13 0:34 · For: For Real?
This is amazing! You should do a second part to the story!!

Author's Response: I am very pleased you like this story. And, I don't see Annie ever realising she's an idiot, do you? :p But if a second part beckons, there definitely will be one! :) Thank you!

Name: baby54boomer (Signed) · Date: 03/03/13 22:49 · For: For Real?
Okay, I get the "Hugo loves Annie, Annie loves Grey" conundrum. Enough said.
As for Annie's present injuries...in light of Grey's abusive history with her, I surmise the Muggle car accident is a ruse...more likely Grey caused the mishap himself. Perhaps Hugo has the same thoughts? And Annie's "condition"...my first jump was that Annie is pregnant; followed by the "accident" to terminate said pregnancy by a very jealous Grey. Would not all of these possibilities give Hugo more incentive to deck Grey like he did?
Good luck with the classes!

Author's Response: Well, to be honest, Annie is probably the most annoying OC I've ever written. I get irritated with people who sacrifice their self-respect, and I've seen it happen so much, it's probably come out of me in the form of a fic, ha! And yes, you're right. Annie wasn't knocked down by a 'Muggle car'. She was abused again. And Hugo knows this, which is why he's angry at the beginning. And this is also why Hugo is specifically called to treat Annie. Grey is aware that any other Healer could report him, but Hugo might not. Hmm. He's mostly wrong. I'm guessing Hugo would report this anyway.

And the 'condition'. Ha! Remember how I said this is last-minute and unbetaed? That's what's attributed to the 'condition'. :p Okay, no, Annie isn't pregnant. Not with Hugo's kid, even if she is (ten years' leap, remember?) In the original plot, Annie was supposed to die. She wouldn't wake up when Hugo tried to awaken her, and then after a lot of complicated medical stuff, she'd die. Her comatose 'condition' is what Hugo is thinking of over there I started writing that part, but it was too late in the night (or early in the morning, if you will -- about 4:00 AM) so I decided to cut it off by just letting her wake up, but having Hugo hit Grey anyway, because this is his chance, hehe. Hugo just took out all his anger on Grey. :p

Oh, classes are going fine, thank you for the review! :)

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