Reviews For The Duel
Reviewer: dmbw7052
Date: 03/25/13 19:11
Chapter: Chapter 1

I really liked the theme of the poem, especially the anticipation it portrays. The style it is written in is spectacularly done. It is very graceful and magnificent.
I feel that this line,
"Spells like heat lightning, slow and bright,"
Is a but confusing. I'm not sure what "heat lightning" is so maybe that's what makes me confused.

I also wish it was a bit longer. Perhaps showing a little more of the winner's feelings after the duel?

All in all, it is very nice, and might be one if my favorite poems yet.

Author's Response: Thank you very much for the kind review. As for 'heat lightning', I guess it might not happen some places - oops. When it's very hot out in summer here, you get sort of lightning in the clouds unaccompanied by either rain or thunder and we call it heat lightning.

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