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Name: owlofluck (Signed) · Date: 12/05/14 10:46 · For: Chapter 1
I thought this was an amazing piece of work. I totally have contemplated these two as a couple before and it is very cool that I have read a story where they are. Also are you thinking about adding a second part to this story?

Author's Response: It's taken me over a year to respond -I'm so sorry, but I'd more or less left the HP fandom, and am only catching up now. Uhm, no, I won't be writing a follow up to this, but I appreciate you asking and for leaving a comment. Thank you again

Name: Fynnsmom (Signed) · Date: 05/27/14 16:26 · For: Chapter 1
I loved it. I'm never sure when I read this sort of thing but you write well enough that it doesn't seem "nasty." :D I didn't expect Harry to come into his dorm room and fall asleep:D But I guess he was tired and had to sleep somewhere. It's good to see what can happen between two people when they're honest. I thought it was beautiful when Dean and Seamus realized how they felt about each other.

Author's Response: Well, Harry at the end of the book (pre-epilogue) is wishing for his bed and wondering if Kreacher will bring him a sandwich, so I thought it would be amusing to have him turn up. Thank you ~Carole

Name: Purple Dragon (Signed) · Date: 09/29/13 20:42 · For: Chapter 1
It's nice to see some minor (or at least other) characters get some love*wink wink* It's very simple, but I really liked the starting point with Seamus going through regrets. It sets the tone really well.

Author's Response: Seamus and Dean always strike me as a couple, whether a love match or a deep friendship bond, I'm not sure. Here the bond has changed to something else, but whatever happens I think they'll always be close. Thank you for the review ~Carole~

Name: Indigo Cygnus (Signed) · Date: 09/29/13 9:20 · For: Chapter 1
I think this is the first Dean/Seamus fic I read and I loved it! First of all I love the characterisation of both boys, you give enough backstory to keep us interested and give us a glimpse of who these people are, but not too much to forget where the story is going. I felt that you handled their relationship authentically and sensitively. It didn't seem forced in any way. Congratulations, this is a lovely fic.

Author's Response: Thank you very much. I think what I most wanted to explore with this story is the great friendship between the pair and how that can segue into something else, not necessarily something more or better, but just a different type of relationship. They nearly lost each other, and that would have been tragic. Thank you again ~Carole~

Name: Ginny Weasley Potter (Signed) · Date: 06/16/13 3:59 · For: Chapter 1
Hey Carole!

I’ve wanted to check this one out for a while -- because in all honesty, I think I’ve secretly shipped Seamus and Dean for a long time now. It’s just that I haven’t seen many Seamus or Dean-centric stories, which is why this intrigued me when you took up the challenge.

I really enjoyed this fic, I must say. It had humour and angst, darkness and a bit of romance, and everything was mixed in the right proportion. I loved how you got into Seamus’s mind to write this, his Irish mind at that, ha, because rarely have I seen characterisation in the narrative, rather than action and dialogue. So this was new and wonderful for me.

I loved how you began the fic with Seamus’s regrets, and explained how he usually tried to hide his real emotions and regrets behind laughter. And then the chronological run-through of his regrets was very well done too. I loved how subtle it was -- how he only regretted persuading Dean to go out with Ginny, without thinking of the real reason behind it. Because here, you haven’t suddenly made them a couple in the end. It’s like, both Seamus and Dean know, deep inside, how they feel for each other, but have just been ignoring it all the while.

Then you went on to describe Seamus’s family life, which is quite an unexplored topic. At least, I’ve never read of it in fanfiction, and it was interesting to read about him. Also, I did not think that he was likely to be Sorted into Hufflepuff, but you‘re right. He was loyal to his mother, loyal to his family, and that would most definitely qualify him to be a Hufflepuff. Also, it explains why at first, he didn’t believe Harry, and chose to go with what his mother had said.

This brings me to the next point: Seamus and Dean getting to talk about whether or not they believed in what Harry had said. I think this scene was important, very important. Dean believes in Harry’s words, and Seamus doesn’t, but when they talk about it. Seamus screwed up his face as he thought about it, but there wasn’t much to say. Much as he’d love to have someone on his side, he preferred Dean watching his back, and he wasn’t letting anything get between that. Seamus, as you have described until now, is fiercely loyal to his family. He has gone against Harry and Ron, and is not talking to Neville. But then the fierceness reduces when it comes to one person: Dean. I think this was a perfect place to subtly hint at what was happening later (though I already knew, because of the warnings, and the fact that this was written for the Cotillion).

So basically, I think the relationship between your two characters was well described. I loved the leg-pulling, and the friendly exchanges. Even when they advanced from mere friendship in the end, nothing was overdone: they were still the same; only more physical than they had been before, because they took their friendship a step further. However, you didn’t leave out the slight tension between them, and I was enjoying all of it, unresolved, and resolved.

I enjoyed the scene before Dumbledore’s funeral, with Seamus finally letting his guard down. Dean’s awkwardness worried me for a bit, but I think all he needed was the months away from his best mate to figure out what he felt for him. However, I felt a sadness at the fact that they were separated for months before they could figure out what they felt for each other. It was cruel, but it was necessary.

I loved it when you got to the battle. Finally, all the emotions were getting sorted, and then the relief that they’d both survived it. The kiss at the end was very well written, and I bet Harry was unaware of what was going on in his dorm when he stumbled into it, ha! But I was glad that the relationship got closure, that Seamus and Dean finally figured out what was going on between them.

All-in-all, I really enjoyed this story. It was amazing, I must say, and it had me grinning and frowning all through, and secretly celebrating when they got together. It was a character study of Seamus, on the whole, that I enjoyed, and I think, for the glimpses of Dean that we got, he was written perfectly too. The plot is very good, and the writing was captivating. Great work, Carole, and all the best for the Cotillion!


Author's Response: Thank you so much for this lovely review and I must apologise for taking so long to respond, but I was too blown away to think of an adequate response. I did love writing this story because I think I love the bromance of Seamus and Dean so much. I hope it shows, really, that they're friends far more than lovers - ha ha. I wonder how this would pan out long term, but hope they'd always have each other in some form. Thank you again ~Carole

Name: siriusisdead (Signed) · Date: 03/04/13 21:03 · For: Chapter 1
I really enjoyed this story. It's well written and I like how you were able to craft a slash story while still developing characters. That shows real understanding of writing.
Great job!

Author's Response: Thnak you very much for the review. I do think development and characterisation is a vital part of a story - rather than just writing something as a fait accompli, so I really appreciate you mentioning that. Thanks again ~Carole~

Name: Ruchira_M (Signed) · Date: 02/28/13 4:44 · For: Chapter 1
I love how all your stories are in so many different styles and so "fecking" effortless.

Author's Response: Thank you! I love how you read them all and find lovely things to say in reviews. Much appreciated. ~Carole~

Name: hestiajones (Signed) · Date: 02/28/13 2:04 · For: Chapter 1

I enjoyed this, Croll. See, I knew the pairing and had a faint idea of how they might get together but the journey was unexpectedly refreshing. You were a bit troubled by the out-of-control flow of your narrative. I'd say put that worry to rest. It swept me along like a storm. A very Irish, funny, blunt, Finniganish storm.

Yeah, glad it wasn't Finnegan or I'd have had to bodily uproot you from Great Britain and carry you off to the Lake Isle of Innisfree.

Okay I went a bit mad there, but I LOVED THIS.



Uproot me, woman, I want to go to Innisfree and watch my honeybees.

Thank you so much for the review. I'm so pleased you liked it because it did rather get away from me. Yeah, a Finniganish storm!

Thanks again ~Carole~

Name: hestiajones (Signed) · Date: 02/28/13 2:00 · For: Chapter 1

Well, I don't have a you-know-what, but yeah, Krum's vand is my thing.

Author's Response: Vere is your vand?

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