I think I would've been disappointed in the story without this chapter. It gave comfort and a small bit of happiness to a man who was going to Azkaban in a short period of time. This chapter added a nice finishing touch. Well written too.
Author's Response: Initially, this was only a one-shot, but I agree that it needed the second chapter. I'm glad you thought it was well-written, and I'm totally with you in that Sirius deserved a bit of happiness in light of what we know happens to him very soon after. Thanks for the review!
That was extremely rude of Rosmerta. It appeared as if she was just using Sirius for sex and then threw him aside. That's not a good thing if you're in the public eye and have the chance of seeing the person again. I liked how this was written. I like both characters and having them together just seems to fit.
Author's Response: I don't think she was being rude. Sure, she treated Sirius badly, but the reason behind that was her conscience, and the fact that Sirius was still a student. More than anything, I think that's why she felt so guilty and did what she did. But thank you for the review - I appreciate it, and I apologise for replying a year too late! I liked writing this story quite a bit, so it's lovely to know it was well-received. :)
YES! Yes, they needed to have s- I mean, get back together again hehehe. How did you manage to slip in all the angst in such a hot moment? You witch you!
No, seriously, I enjoyed this. This Rosmerta is different from Gina's which I read last night, but I love both versions. I want her and Sirius to get together, even though I know it's not going to happen. -sigh-
There was a part where you said "James and me have fought". I don't know if that was an error or if you wrote "me" in place of "I" deliberately. Apart from that, no hiccups. Lovely writing, Soraya!
Author's Response: LULZ. Well, they do have sex. Hours of it, in fact... *snigger*
But again, thank you so much for the compliments! (Didn't anyone tell you that I AM a witch -- just one with a .38 beta pistol? :D) Yeah, I read Gina's Remus/Rosmerta and agree that this one is very different from hers. It means a lot to me that you love both versions :3 Sirius and Rosmerta do kind of get together, at least sporadically while he's in the Order. It's just that he then goes to Azkaban, poor dear. :(
Ummm, I did kind of put that there to make Sirius sound more colloquial, but I'm not quite sure it came off properly :/ I may go and revisit that. Thank you!
I am honestly gobsmacked at how much you, Carole and Gina have enjoyed this :D I didn't think it was very good, hehe, but your reviews have made me think otherwise now. I really appreciate your reviews, my love, and I will definitely be reading your Dominique/OC once the Cotillion's over -- just let me finish my two stories due in tomorrow first, lol. I heart youuuuuuu!
I don't know why I'm saying ha! I just felt like I had to because GODDAMN that was some hot writing there :P
But, yes, don't think I only pay attention to the smut. I'm not that depraved! I thought your writing flowed very well; it was lucid and emotive. I loved the morning after part a lot.
Well, now I need to rush and find out what happens to them. Excuse me.
Author's Response: Yayayayayay, you thought it was hot! RESULT! Actually, I was so worried the smut would come across as gratuitous and/or inaccurate, lol, but I did do some, er, research before I wrote it. (I basically badgered Jamie/Acacia Carter and she told me all about the delights of bar sex... hahaha) Anyway, it means so much to me that you enjoyed that, ahem, aspect of the story :D
I'm so glad you thought my writing flowed well! One thing I also wasn't too sure about was if it worked in rather uneven sections. I'm glad you thought it was lucid and emotive -- yeah, Rosmerta was drunk, but she wasn't *that* drunk, and I think she knew that the morning after. And yayyy, you liked that bit! :) Thank you so much for the review, my dear Natalie. *squish* It means a lot!
Oh, that's a happier ending! Ha ha - Mind you, I'd have liked to know exactly waht he and James were fighting over ... so I think you need to write chapter 3 :p
Small crit: Rosmerta says they were protecting Muggles who died, but Sirius hadn't mentioned Muggles, just that he was protecting 'people'.
Nice lighthearted end there - and more sex for Sirius and Rosmerta, thankfully without alcohol :D ~Carole~
Author's Response: I don't think I'll write a chapter 3, sorry, lolol :P I did kind of hint at what they were fighting about (Sirius mentions something about this being their first mission protecting people and how he basically botched it up?), but yeah, maybe I should've made that clearer :/
Oooh, thanks for that! I always miss inconsistencies like that, so I appreciate you pointing it out for me :) But yayayayay to sober!sex, hehe. I do think they needed that -- Rosmerta probably chalked up the whole thing to alcohol even though she was very much attracted to Sirius in his own right. She needed to realise that, hence the tea!sex (far more exciting, if you ask me).
Croll, thank you so much for leaving such lovely reviews. You are lovely and I heart you lots, because I was feeling kind of crappity about this fic when I was done with it -- you know that feeling when you've gone over something so. many. times, and eventually you're just like f*** this? Well, that's how I felt about this one. SO long story short, thank you thank you thank you! *squish*
"Well, this scene wasn't really meant to happen, lol"
YES IT WAS!
Thank you :)
I liked it, but I'll write more later. Hee hee. I love the Marauders.
~Seriously Sirius twin (Gina)
Author's Response: Hahahaha, it really wasn't meant to happen! Sirius was meant to stay heartbroken forever, you know ;)
LOL. No, thank you for prodding me to write more. As I said, I had planned on writing more (I promise I wasn't ignoring your suggestions!), but I just thought I'd run out of time, that's all. I'm really glad I added this second chapter because I think Sirius comes full circle in this (literally, lolol) and he needed that for this story to feel complete to me, you know?
Anyway, thank youuuuu so much for the reviews! I've been awful at reviewing but am hoping to get more done once I'm done with my Marlene story and my Albus/Rose story (meep, I only have like two days to finish both D:). But I really, really appreciate your input on this, Gina, and I heart you so much for always reviewing. It means SO MUCH.
Oh noooooo - that's so sad! But...but...there's more, yeah? You'll write some of the stuff we talked about? Please? ;)
Good job with this. I know I suggested some other things (hahaha) but I think you did good by ignoring them (although they would have worked too, right? lol!) The bit with the bar was well done, so kudos on going there! The short scene where she wakes up was great for showing us the consequences. It's good that she understands the implication, but at the same time I sort of want to shake her and say - so what! It's okay, you can be together, lol! But with your last scene, I can really see why you chose to take it all this direction. It was really heartbreaking to see Rosmerta's nervousness and then Sirius's disappointment and hurt. So, so sad! I really do hope you write a bit more of them so they can work it out - for good or ill. It feels finished, yes, but having talked to you I want the rest (haha look who's talking given how I ended my James/Remus thing, lol)
Anyway - that's rambly - sorry - but great job with this, I enjoyed it a lot!
Author's Response: Hehehe, well, the thing about the stuff we talked about is all sorted :D No, honestly, I had the beginning of the second chapter written last night (this was when I was under the impression that the story had to be in by 8am on the 26th), but it was midnight and I was just like no, lol. And then I realised I had more time, so I spent most of this evening finishing that :D
By the way, I actually went and poked Jamie about how plausible it was for two people to have sex in a bar, lolol, and she was like "hell yeah". And, of course, Jamie being lovely, she also gave me some other giggly hints that I don't think would be appropriate to mention here XD
Hmm, I think there are two sides to the argument regarding Sirius being a student and all. On the one hand, he's a student and she's supposed to be responsible, but on the other, he's also seventeen years old, so both by British Muggle and British magical standards, he is legally allowed to shag her as he pleases ;) At least, as far as I know? It's more of a thing of reputation than anything, really.
And yeah, the morning after scene was soooo hard to write. (I'm saying that about most of the fic -- sorry. :P) I do think it was kind of complete on its own but still needed something else, mostly because I don't think I gave either character proper closure. At least with the second chapter there was something a bit more full circle about it, and that way, if you're reading, you can ignore the fact that Sirius gets banged up in Azkaban and Rosmerta is convinced Sirius is a mass murderer :(
You have no idea how much this made me squee. Thank you so much for the lovely review, Gina, but also for the endless encouragement. I so needed it, hehe :)
OH NO!!!!! OH OH OH - POOOR SIRIUS!!! (sorry, I must stop shouting) I feel really sorry for him and I wasn;t expecting to because he was such a cocky git first of all :(.
Delicious smut, Soraya. Seriously, I thought that part of the story was very well written, and I don;t mean just because it was smut, but you managed to get a real intensity between the pair of them.
That's not to say the rest of it wasn't well-written - ha ha - just that I liked the smut the best. And the morning after which was just so very sad. :(
Well done ~Carole~
Author's Response: Hahhahaha, I do have a habit of torturing the characters I love :D And yeah, he's been through a lot, which is why I think he has the whole cocky thing going on, as Rosmerta so aptly put it.
OMG, I am so happy you liked the smut! I'll be honest, writing that was like pulling teeth, lol, but now I have the Croll!seal of approval, I can breathe easier :D Yeah, the morning after was sad, but you know they kind of get their ending eventually ;)
Thank youuuuuuuuu for the fantabulous review. I heart you lots, Croll!