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Name: Gmariam (Signed) · Date: 02/27/13 17:14 · For: Chapter 3 -Legilimens
This was really good! I looked up Thomas Seymour and Elizabeth and just had no idea something like that had happened to her. That Lucius picked it up through Legilimency after kissing her made it very sad. He seems to really like her, so I felt a bit bad for him at the end. And now there's another chapter for me to read tonight, and it sounds both fantastic and scary! This is so very cool. :)
~Gina :)

Author's Response: The Thomas Seymour 'affair' is chronicled in history, although no one is actually sure how far anything went. Kat Champernowne was in the Tower at the time when she made the allegations, and the Crown were certainly after any evidence against Seymour. However there were other statements made my servants not in the Tower. The other thing about Kat's statement is that she implicated the Dowager Queen (Catherine Parr) who was actually dead by then, so she didn;t have to name her, and it kind of makes me think there's some truth in it. It is fact that Elizabeth lived with them, and fact that Catherine Parr sent her back when she discovered Elizabeth in Thomas's arms.(arms might be a euphemism) He had wanted to marry Elizabeth, and was refused again when his wife died. *wipes brow* - Very condensed history there, but completely enthralling when I was reading about it - heh heh.

Thank you so much for the review, Gina. ~Carole~

Name: Redwing (Signed) · Date: 02/27/13 12:24 · For: Chapter 4 - Prisons
Man, I don't want to start rooting for Elizabeth and Lucius, because it can't work out. Or... maybe it can work out? Maybe Elizabeth never marries because she's carrying on a secret affair with Lucius, but can't marry him in the open? At the very least, I hope she gets to learn magic... Great story so far.

Author's Response: Mwahahahahah - well, the last chapter is up now, so you shall see whether it works out, secretly, or not. As far as magic goes, well she never got to Hogwarts, sadly. Apologies if this is too short, but I was writing for a challenge and it had to be under 15K. Perhaps I'll write a follow up :) Thanks again for your reviews ~Carole~

Name: Ruchira_M (Signed) · Date: 02/27/13 8:07 · For: Chapter 1 ~ Pavone Bianco
I haven't watched Elizabeth, but I read Kenilworth by Walter Scott, there he shows Dudley as a nobleman favoured by the Queen who marries Amy in secret and then refuses to acknowledge her because he wants to marry the QUEEN.

Author's Response: Ahh, well, the historical record show that she was at his wedding, so I think he's stretching the truth a little. In Elizabeth, she doesn't know he's married. Amy actually died in 1560, which left him free to marry Elizabth except the rumour was he'd arranged for her murder. It would also have been an unpopular move on Elizabeth's part. And I could go on about this for another 1000 words - ha ha - as the history of this obsesses me rather, but I won't. :D Thank you ~Carole~

Name: Ruchira_M (Signed) · Date: 02/27/13 7:58 · For: Chapter 4 - Prisons
Intense chapter. And I like this Lucius a lot more than I expected to, seeing that he is the ancestor of the Lucius we know.
Dudley and Amy Robstart...umm, that would be the novel- Kenilworth, right? Although in that one they married when E was already queen and it was clandestine...but I suppose Scott took liberties...
I liked King Edward.

Author's Response: Um, I don;t know any of the novels. History states that Robert married Amy in 1550 when Elizabeth was sventeen. She went along with Edward VI. He did marry someone in 1578 called Lettice Knollys, who was the Queen's cousin, but not sure if that's the subject of Scott's novel, Basically the Elizabeth film took a lot of liberties with the facts as well. I've tried to be a little more accurate, but it's quite hard at times. Thank you for the review. ~Carole~

Name: Ruchira_M (Signed) · Date: 02/26/13 22:52 · For: Chapter 2 - The Falcon's Daughter
An interesting look at Anne. I don't think "The Other Bolyen Girl" was very kind to her.

Author's Response: I've not actually read The Other Boleyn Girl, or seen the film, so can't really comment on that. I'm ambivalent about Anne, but don't think she deserved death. Thank you for the review. ~Carole~

Name: Gmariam (Signed) · Date: 02/23/13 17:42 · For: Chapter 2 - The Falcon's Daughter
Oooh, Elizabeth has magic! That's really neat. I could really picture that scene with Lucius and the flowers and her screaming reaction, it was well done. And I'm still loving Kat as a character. Lucius was a bit snotty at the beginning but not so bad later on, as he seems to have a genuine interest in Elizabeth beyond what his mother is forcing.
The last line was sort of heartbreaking. I think what's so amazing is how from the teeny tiny bit I know of Elizabeth, you seem to have extrapolated her character back to childhood wonderfully well. I am really enjoying reading this.
One question, as I know you've researched it all: why was Elizabeth deemed illegitimate and stripped of being a Princess?
Great job!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Ah, okay. Her father married Anne Boleyn (her mother) having divorced his previous wife (Catherine of Aragon) without the Pope's assent. He then set up the Protestant religion so he could marry Anne. When he decided he wanted to marry someone else (Jane Seymour, mother of Edward VI), he declared his previous two marriages null and void. Elizabeth and Mary were deemed illegitimate and were not allowed to hold the title of princess. Infact, after the age of three (when her mother was executed), Elizabeth was not deemed to be a Princess.

End of history lesson. Glad you're enjoying it and I hope the historical facts don;t put you off - eeeep. Oh, and Lucius is a Malfoy - of course he's a bit of a git - hahhahahahah. ~Carole~

Name: Gmariam (Signed) · Date: 02/18/13 21:08 · For: Chapter 1 ~ Pavone Bianco
I LOVE THIS! I know nothing about this period, have read next to no historical fiction, not even watched a tv show or movie really and I LOVED IT! It is so cool! Like, I totally believe it, 100 percent.
Amazing things about this story: young Elizabeth. Love love love. So vibrant and strong. Her reaction to Lucius was just priceless.
Also, the Malfoys. You made them less hateful than our modern Malfoys, even while maintaining their obvious ambition. And the white peacock! Wow! Is that what Pottermore said too?
And Kat - a magical governess! How very Mary Poppins (whom I have always thought was a witch from Hogwarts - likely good friends with Dumbledore, too.) But she, as well as all your other characters, immediately leapt off the page.
I had no idea what to think when you claimed this pairing and I'm so excited to follow it now. Amazing job, Carole. Really amazing. I hope it gets more reads and reviews! Good luck!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: You really should read about the era, Gina, it's fascinating. I had a strong interest in this period when I was about 7, and then studied it at school, and there's so much intrigue going on. Elizabeth was avery remarkable Queen, as well.

Okay, so Pottermore doesn't mention the peacock, but the birds were around in Tudor times (they used to eat them - shudder), but I decided to include it as a link to the Lucius we know. Having the emblem come from Lucius's mother made more sense (plus the blonde hair). The Pottermore story is that the Malfoys were prominent at the Tudor Court (I won;t tell you the exact details as it will ruin part of the story). This is all before the Statute of Secrecy, and the Malfoys enjoyed mixing with highborn Muggles. They change they mind and deny this a century later when the Statute is brought in.

Kat Champernowne dis exist and was a very close confidante of Elizabeth's and had a profound influence on her, which is why I've included her and made her magic :)

Thank you so much for the review ~Carole~

Name: FearlessFlyer (Signed) · Date: 02/18/13 20:55 · For: Chapter 1 ~ Pavone Bianco
Intriguing premise. There was much more room for wizarding influence on society before the Statute of Secrecy, and since I'm a big fan of historical fiction, I'm looking forward eagerly to see where you go with this.

Author's Response: Thank you so much. This is based on Pottermore canon, but as I find the Tudor history fascinating I'm trying to keep it as factual as possible (which is causing some problems). There's so much story - ha - it's hard knowing what to leave out. ~Carole~

Name: CanisMajor (Signed) · Date: 02/18/13 20:11 · For: Chapter 1 ~ Pavone Bianco
I like it. I don't know whether you could get away with sending Elizabeth to Hogwarts, but if not, I'm sure you have something just as interesting planned for her. How long is this story going to be?

One quibble: the year is 1643? Surely you mean 1543?

Author's Response: AGHH! Yes, I do mean 1543 - thank you so much for pointing that out! I have all the dates on my timeline in front of me then muck up when it comes to the summary - hahahaha. Thank you so much for the review. I know you're an excellent historical writer so I hope the rest of the story passes muster. Hmm, Elizabeth at Hogwarts would be interesting, but, alas there's too much data for her being around during her teens to make it feasible. Okay, this story is for a challenge, so it has to be under 15K, so I'm working on around the 5 chapter mark. However, I'm becoming increasingly fascinated by the Tudors (which I hadn;t really looked at since school) so there's a strong chance that this will be the first part of a story about her.

Thank you so much for the review and for pointing out my ridiculous error!


Name: Ruchira_M (Signed) · Date: 02/18/13 7:09 · For: Chapter 1 ~ Pavone Bianco
Good start.

Author's Response: Thank you. ~Carole~

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