Reviews For Penumbra
Reviewer: Nagini Riddle
Date: 03/26/13 1:04
Chapter: Chapter 1

I really enjoyed the asides you used. They add so much dimension to the piece!

Great subject, by the way. Trying to capture the struggle of Dumbledore's when he finds the resurrection stone. :) I liked how the poem didn't read overly fast, like he was greatly contemplating his decision.

I feel, though, that it could have had a bit more of a rushed feeling to it only to add the complex dimensionality of a rash decision. But honestly, it does well the way it is. The last line really says it all and spells out that regret. :)

I can't wait to read more of your work (again). :)

Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 02/17/13 15:41
Chapter: Chapter 1

This is fabulous. I really love the italicised lines, as if the ring is whispering to him. It's so insidious because he must have known there was a curse, and yet, even Albus, with all his wisdom, is susceptible to human fraility. Gahhhd the need to right what had gone wrong must have been so intense, and you capture this so very well in this poem.

Well done! ~Carole~

Author's Response:

Crollllll in the dungeonnnnnn!

I was trolling for something to pierce and I stumbled upon this. I remember being happy with it when I wrote it, but that I still like it over a year later is pretty good. It is just fascinating to see the old adage in action: proper know what is good or.bad for them, but their choices rarely reflect which one.is the logical choice. Such is the case here.

Thanks for reviewing. <3

~Jess

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