Reviews For A Chance Encounter
Reviewer: Oregonian
Date: 02/25/14 15:07
Chapter: Chapter 1

Hi, Linda. This is Vicki from Slytherin House, commenting on A Chance Encounter, the second story of your trilogy.

At first, this part of the tale of Snape and Winifred seemed like a story just about sex, and I wasn’t sure what the purpose of this story was. Of course one should read the first part, Snape’s Interlude, and the final part, Winifred’s Dream, in order to understand this one, its references and implications. When one has done so, the function of this episode becomes clearer, even though this story does not have a lot of what we would consider “plot”. Its purpose seems to be to show that Winifred still harbored a desire to re-connect with Snape and a hope that they could have a future together, despite his insistence that it must be over between them, and to show Snape as affected by her but still resolute, and therefore the stronger of the two.

There is a notable contrast between Snape’s almost instantaneous crumbling of resistance when he unexpectedly encounters Winifred in Diagon Alley and his rock-like insistence at the end that their feelings for each other cannot be paramount over his “important situation”. I loved the way you conveyed the idea that, emotionally, Snape did want this liaison, by having him say “I don’t think I should be seen with you,” and, moments later, “I have a room there for tonight” before he could stop himself. You have made it plain that she wants it too, “coaxing” him, countering his “it wouldn’t be wise” with “we don’t always have to do what’s wise.” Total end of resistance! Conquered with barely a shot fired! But in the morning Snape gets ahold of himself, and you show this transition well in the two contrasting lines: “He looked back at her, then at the floor, shifting his weight from one foot to the other as he sighed heavily and said…” and moments later “A few seconds passed in silence, then he faced her again; his dark eyes met her gaze steadily, and he said coolly…”

Snape seems a little out of character in that he is shown as having, in his later years, a tender, loving side with at least a little openness. We do not see him depicted this way as an adult in the seven books, but it is a favorite premise of authors, perhaps because we sympathize with Snape and see him as a tragic character, despite his unjustified bullying of Harry and the Gryffindors. So there exist many stories which give him a happier outcome: a wife or sweetheart, a child, even a longer life. We authors and readers are to be forgiven for wanting this; his was a tragic tale.

Your writing style is graceful and fluid, without awkwardness or choppiness in sentences. You provide good details of little actions and surroundings, that make the scenes and events easy to visualize. The only thing that gave me pause, other than the spelling of Beauxbatons, was the initial premise that Snape was in Diagon Alley just to hang around and keep his eyes and ears open for any significant information. That seemed a little improbable, although of course Dumbledore can make any assignments he wants.

As part of the trilogy, this is an enjoyable little story in that it informs us a bit more about their relationship, but, as you indicated by saying that initially you planned that they should never meet again, it’s not crucial to the story as a whole. Thank you for writing!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your detailed review. I found it very helpful, and I was glad to know that your impressions of the story were so close to what I had intended. You are right when you note that so many authors--myself included--want to see Snape with a happier outcome, but as long as we stick to canon, his story always has to end tragically. That's why the next story I'm planning is going to be an AU.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 09/27/13 17:51
Chapter: Chapter 1

That was so sad. I still think she was pregnant and had Severus' baby. That's why she was so evasive about the details of her life. doesn't Beauxbatons have an x in it?

Author's Response: I'm glad to know that's how you felt. You are very perceptive. Beauxbatons has an x in it? Oops. I'm surprised the betas didn't catch that.

Author's Response: I'm glad to know that's how you felt. You are very perceptive. Beauxbatons has an x in it? Oops. I'm surprised the betas didn't catch that.

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