You always bring refreshing ideas to the table, Ariana! Both characters were dealing with some really serious issues here. I've never pictured either of them in situations such as these, but now I'm leaving with strong impressions. What will happen to them? Will Anthony be cured?
The writing was as lucid and lovely as can be expected from you :) I loved that part where her buttons fall to the ground and Anthony pictures them as eyes. His reluctance versus her appeal were also captured in some truly haunting words.
My only crit is that, when I finished the story, I was left wanting so much more. It was a little rushed for me; the part about Anthony's non-sexuality could have been developed further. I'm sure this has more to do with time constraints and your mounting responsibilities than anything else. I've also grown to expect so much from you, since you're one of the strongest writers here.
All in all, though, this is one of the most intriguing entries of this challenge. Good luck, my goddess, and keep writing!
Author's Response: Natalie! Thank you so much for reviewing :). I am so glad that you liked this story. The premise was a little strange for me to figure out how to write at first, especially Anthony's characterization. I do wish that I had developed that further; I was pushed for time on the first chapter, but not so much on the second chapter…I think I often times know the fully-fleshed out story in my head and forget that readers don't know it. Thank you again for the review! It was positively lovely to hear from you :) xx Ariana
OHHH perfect! I love this story, Ariana, and it's a crime it hasn't got more reviews. It's so original, for one thing, and just briliantly written. I'm wondering if I can squee any more, but just ... I really really really like this.
Sorry, rubbish review. I will try and be a bit more coherent. I think what I like best is that you haven;t got clear cut goodies and baddies here. Anthony did not behave well with Lisa and is thus suffering, Romilda is a selling her body. Neither are behaving well, but it's Romilda who is the honest one and emerges with some semblance of honour. I'm so pleased they got together at the end and I'm hoping it will last, but ... hmmm ... I wonder.
Damn, I might have to write fanfiction of fanfiction now - hahahahah.
Fabulous story. Good luck in the Challenge. ~Carole~
Author's Response: I am so excited you liked this! I wasn't sure about the idea originally, because sometimes there are weird things that I think are interesting but not so much for anyone else :). It really means so much that you reviewed both chapters, I know there's a review lull of sorts on the site but I still worry incessantly that a story might not be well-received it it gets few reviews, so thank you so much ♥.
I'm hoping it will last as well, and I think for a while it will. But either Romilda has to decide that physical love isn't extremely necessary (haha, not likely) or Anthony has to fully recover from what he did to Lisa. I hope I redeemed Romilda in this, I'm starting to like her quite a bit. And definitely feel free to use these characters and write a follow-up, ha ha. I might one day (but I don't think I'm allowed to for this challenge). xx Ariana
They are both a bit sad and I hope they find some happiness ib the unfolding story.
Author's Response: They are quite sad :( . Stay tuned for the next chapter, where the future of their happiness will be revealed! Thank you immensely for the review. xx Ariana
Thank Merlin this is chaptered, or I'd have had to hex you, or refuse to write you any more mad pairings!
I LOVE this concept. From the summary alone I was gaping because it's such a fabulous idea and you've written it in such a way that it makes perfect sense. Anthony, you dick, it's because you were a git to Lisa! Wow these Claws aren;t very good at sussing it out - ha ha. (Sorry for the Claws reading this, but you need Gryffs, Slyths or Puffs to help you out) Um, sorry, will get back to the review. I couldn;t remember the pairing you had picked, so was intrigued as to the identity of the woman. I will admit to thinking it was going to be Pansy, so was pleased to be proved wrong. Romilda is one of the default bad characters (like Pansy and Lav-lav) but you have managed to imbue her with a proper personality, Ariana. The slight show of vulnerability when it's clear she has nowhere to stay, and the matter of fact way she deals with her situation, is perfect. She was a girl in the books who knew what she wanted and acted upon it. She's the same here.
I'm rooting for both of them. Great story ~Carole~
Author's Response: Yay, thank you for the review! I'm so so flattered that you like it :). This is only a two-shot, so just one more chapter. I love writing the default bad characters, sometimes I feel that because they're seen as 'bad' we can write them with a little more spunk and crass than any other characters. The next chapter should be up by tomorrow or later tonight if I don't feel like waiting. xx Ariana