Ooooooooh!
Carole, this was really interesting! :) Honestly, I expected the usual scenario (or at least what seems to be the usual scenario) of a teacher giving a student detention and then something going on there. This was therefore very unexpected in a good way :)
Charity is a lovely teacher! I would love to have been taught by her -- I think you did a great job in making her a really likeable and well-rounded character. Also, I giggled at Professor Sinistra's comment about not smiling till Christmas :P
And poor Oliver :( I can see how this kind of classroom discussion could get nasty, even if it is a really interesting discussion they got into. I think the way you presented a classroom situation and kept it so engaging with teh dialogue was fabulous, especially the things they were learning in Muggle Studies, because that's one subject I've always been curious about. I think you did a great job with that, and I liked Oliver's appreciation of Shakespeare in particular ;)
Anyway, I would love to see where things go from here, Croll! :D This was a great start, and I am intrigued, especially as this is when Oliver is in fourth year -- I'm guessing anything that happens with them would probably take place when he's at least a little older? Anyway, update soon, and once again, YAYYYY COW BISCUITS :D
Soraya xxx
Author's Response: Cow Biscuits to you, too.
Soraya, thank you so much for the review. Hmm, I wanted to write this as a teacher/student that's as unsquicky as possible. Basically everyone seems to think of the Snape and someone, but the female teachers could have been as young as I've made Charity, and it's not entirely squicky if the boy is of age, in my opinion. I also decided a long time ago that this wouldn't be a kept in detention accidentally brewing Love Potions scenario - ha ha ha. Thanks again ~Carole~
What happened between Flint and Charity?
Author's Response: Hushhhhh, no spoilers! All will be revealed in the next chapter ... well ... it will become a little clearer. :) Thanks for the review. :) ~Carole~
Well, I'm very picky about Oliver, and I like him here so far...
Having taught Shakespeare to reluctant Muggles, I must say Charity is doing far, far better than average on her first outing.
There really is something repellent about certain of those Slytherins, isn't there...
Author's Response: Charity is just dabbling with Shakespeare. A small peak at Julius Caesar, it won't be a set text - ha ha. Repellent Slytherins ... hmmmmm, Marcus is a Slytherin, and yes, he's repellent, but have I said which house Dorinda is in? Mwahahahahah. Thank you for the review, Thea and I'm glad Oliver hasn;t annoyed you ... yet. :) ~Carole~
I really like this so far! I meant to open this in a window read a little bit later, because we were about to start dinner, but the first paragraph caught my eye and then I couldn't stop reading. I've never really considered Oliver a character I had to read about, but you've already made me fall slightly in love with him in this chapter. I'm also ready to kill Dorinda and Marcus, and I'm slightly in awe of you - how you've made me feel so strongly about characters in just one chapter.
I'm excited to read the next part of this, I'll try to be patient :).
xx Ariana
Author's Response: I hope your dinner didn;t get cold! Thank you so much for the review, and I'm really pleased that the first paragraph intrigued you enough to read on because I was setting it up to sound like a scary DE scene when really it was her first day of teaching - ha! Dorinda and Marcus are gits, but maybe not irredeemable. :) ~Carole~
Interesting start, Carole! I love how you've brought these proverbs into the magical world and have the students (especially Oliver) discovering their meaning. You've given us a spot-on Percy and whoever Dorinda is, you've given us a lovely witch to hate, lol. I really liked Charity in your other fics so getting to read her again is lovely. And I'm intrigued by this strange connection to Marcus Flint--and how things will play out with the pairing given the setting. So glad you were able to submit it, good luck as you continue!
~Gina :)
Author's Response: Ah, Marcus Flint, the party troll we all love to hate. Uhm, well, maybe we shall hate him eternally, maybe we shall grow to love him and pick flowers to garland his hair with. Uh, okay, I've just switched to a different astral plane altogether. Dorinda is a b1tch, there's no doubt about that, but she might grow on you a little (depends on word count - ha ha) I am pleased you like Percy because he's a little bit stumbling here, but I figured when he's not being Mr prefect and lording it over his brothers, he might feel quite insecure and touchy about money (like Ron). Thank you for reviewing. ~Carole~
I like this a lot! It kind of makes me sad that she will die but I am hoping you will change that!
Author's Response: I wish she hadn't died either :( . Thank you for the review. ~Carole~
Interesting characters.
Author's Response: Thank you! ~Carole~
Very promising first chapter! Hope you upodate soon! Also it shows that even Muggles can profit from Muggle Studies - I'd never heard that proverb before . . . ;-)
Author's Response: I hope to update next week. I heard that proverb a few years ago in a TV programme called Foyles War and it's stuck with me ever since. I was waiting for a story to use it in. Thank you for reading and reviewing. ~Carole~
