That was so sweet. I really like the job you did with the characterisation of both Oliver and Neville, I never would've imagined as a couple, but after reading this, I can see it. I would like to see where this couple's story goes so if you plan to write more, just let me know. Cheers!
One of the few fan fics I can relate to. Well done!
brave neville just like he always is
EEEEEEEEEEEE! You, my dear, have the unfair advantage of making any slashy pairing totally UNF even though we don’t get to see any yummy action. How do you do it? Because this is so fabulous, Jamie, and you really do need to have more faith in yourself because I really enjoyed it :)
Hahahaha, Luna is just hilarious and very much in character with her eagle eye intuition; I love how bluntly she just said that Neville didn’t like girls. Aah, that still makes me giggle.
And AWWWW NEVILLE IS SO ADORABLE. (I don’t even care that I’m shoving capitals at you, lol -- it's your own fault for writing such a squee-worthy story :P) That bit where he smiles shyly is so cute. And Oliver is totes UNF. Seriously. (Well, naturally, he would be, but he’s even more hot in this story for some reason. Great job :D) I like how they both kind of hesitated about how long they’ve known each other and how they’re pretty much polar opposites, since Neville doesn’t fly and Oliver is obsessed with it. Ooh, and I love the detail about Neville falling off his broom -- that is something I didn’t really think about, but yeah, that explains why Neville doesn’t like flying.
Mmm, I hate to be a canon nut, but I do have a slight quibble about Neville having never met Oliver -- they seemed to have been bringing in bodies from the grounds together, if I remember correctly, so they must have been at least a little acquainted with each other (insofar that they would have had a conversation at least). Just something I thought I should mention.
Heehehehehehe, the tattoo! :D Gah, that just makes Oliver even smexier, damn it. And awww, Neville made tea, bless him.
And yaaaaaaaaay, Neville finally worked up the courage to kiss him :D Aww, that was a really lovely ending to a fabulous story that I thoroughly enjoyed! I apologise for the complete and utter lack of professionalism in this review, but it’s your fault for writing them so well, lady. :P Well done!
As always, I love Neville's voice here. I thought you did good with his confusion and uncertainty. The pairing is yummy and the end was super romantic. Really not sure what you're worried about, as usual. Wait till you see my hot mess coming up, it may be the first time I mess up a Jily fic, lol. ;)
I wonder if Neville and Oliver would make it? I mean the whole Quidditch player/never-been-back-on-a-broom could get in the way. Then again, it might not. Oliver could like being with someone away from it all. And they definitely have the war in common. I'm only saying this because I wonder if you'll write more of them, or if you have an OTP for Neville that you prefer?
Anyway, I think you've done good - it was great to see/read your writing again! Good luck! ~Gina :)
Interesting idea, but I prefer the more common view of snake slayer Longbottom.