Wow! I really enjoyed this! :) I actually thought that you were brilliant by leaving out capitalization and punctuation and just letting thoughts stream together, some not making any sense. Very poignant and the meloncholic tone really grabbed me. Great job! :) Don't hesitate to write some more poetry...

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked my poem! I have always loved free verse; it's very good for conveying meaning, and it can sound nice too, if you make it flow right. I was actually not sure how I felt about the nonsensical-ness of my poem--it would make more sense if I had put commas in four or five places (but the mod wouldn't let me), or if I had added long spaces between words, instead of commas (but the site won't show them!) So it's really nice to hear that you think it's good even without that, and that you liked the tone! Adding emotion to the tone was tricky, since the theme of the poem is Alice's inability to understand what emotions and meaning are! As for more poetry--I just posted a new one, and there are several more in the making... :D