I enjoyed this very much, and although I am a huge Drarry fan, I agree that it takes A LOT of work to make plausible. You really managed to capture the raw emotion in each character, and Draco's action in ending Harry's life really resonates with yet defies his character at the same time. I enjoyed your take on him, especially since many stories featuring Draco tend to be OC or OOC. I also wish J.K. had been a little more forgiving toward her character and give him a nice redemption factor, besides what was in the epilogue. I dislike the epilogue. Ahem, back to the point--although this fic was very sad, I think you did a wonderful job writing it and I enjoyed it very much.
I'm really happy you enjoyed this as a legit Drarry shipper, Elsie. We don't have many of those around here, so it takes a lot to win over the canon crowd. It takes a lot just to conceive something where they would even go there, let alone there be anything to happen at all, so that I managed to gain the appreciation from both sides of the fence is a relief.
Personally, I think JK dropped the ball a bit on her portrayal of Slytherins, in general. Think about it; they are often portrayed as either slobbering morons or scheming devils. The amount of antagonism is grossly out of proportion with the rest of the houses. Some of it may be the point of view, since Harry is convinced early that Slytherins are bad, but a good reader can see past a narrator's prejudice and discern some truth from that. JK didn't leave much truth outside of Marcus Flint being a buck-tooth moron or Crabbe and Goyle being Tweedle Dumb and Tweedle Dumber with no talent other than torturing people.
Anyway, I'll shut up now. It's nice to talk characters with someone who ships fun things like Drarry but still understands that OOC doesn't have to be the rule rather than the exception for a ship to sail.
Not quite what I would expect at Christmas.
Haha, probably not. But, as I don't celebrate Christmas, it doesn't particularly bother me. I picked the date because it's something that the Dark Lord wanted the people to mark in their minds. Who could forget the Christmas that Harry Potter Died? It seemed appropriate for both the timeline changes I chose and the point he wanted to make.
Overall, it's a rather dark piece, but I'm pretty happy with how it came out. Thanks for stopping in and letting me know what you think.
It was dark!!! Thou liest and I can't laugh. I can't do the laughy laughy thing because ....
Can't spoil, so will continue properly. Jess, I'm depressed now. I wanted a big rescue scebe and them to run off into the sunset holding hands and have lots of little dark haired grey-eyed children or blonde haired green-eyed children through the magic of Mpreg. But ... that would have been implausible and this is the only way it could have ended. Brilliant ending, btw, The Dark Lord didn't quite get his victory because of the laughter which I don;t think the original victim would have been able to muster.
I will say that I wasn't expecting Harry to be quite so broken, but it makes perfect sense when he's lost everything important to him.
Narcissa was a reveleation. I know she'll do anything for her son, but the concern here was wonderful and gave another great insight into her character.
I'll end by saying that you know what I'm like with Voldemort wins stories, I don't like them, but this was a great read, plausible and does make me think that maybe there's something in them after all. so if you wrote another, then perhaps you'd get yourself a loyal follower - MwaHAHAHAHAHAHHAHA.
Damnation! I HAVE to write an AU now, just can't think of anything plausible.
Well done and I hope you get a lot more reads and reviews because this deserves it. ~Carole~
I know this is far from what you normally go for, so thank you for stopping in anyway. Really, though, I do think it offers a palatable AU scenario for AU sceptics. The scene I chose that changed everything is something that anyone has to admit could've turned out differently than canon. And as you would realise, without their capture and detention at Malfoy Manor, the don't run into Griphood, and their Horcrux hunt never comes to fruition. Really, after losing that ridiculous piece of luck, it's no wonder they all die.
Harry was...delicate in this. I think he had honestly given up at this point. He had no one left to fight for. Think of King's Cross, where Harry was offered the choice between going back to fight and moving on to the afterlife, and he thought long and hard about not going back. Well, without all the things that had drawn him back, would he still choose to fight and live in hell than die and be done with it. I did a lot of soul-searching in this. Really, I think his snarking with Draco was the first sign of life he'd shown for ages, and it allowed him to die as himself and not a bag of miserable flesh.
I debated with Narcissa, but what really pushed me to include her was the fact that Draco wouldn't have gone to see Harry if she hadn't suggested it, but I think she knew he would be miserable if he didn't get this off his chest. Maybe she did think it was a silly crush that he needed to exorcise, but she loved him (despite who he loved) and wanted him to have some relief. Did she think Draco was going to kill Harry and end up being executed? Haha, no. But Draco wouldn't have dreamt it, either, if you think about it. I think it's where Draco finally learnt that there really are worse things than dying -- like living the life he was, tiptoeing around his own house and his life.
I posited a few different scenarios and hashed them out with a very patient someone, but in the end, this one was the one that presented the best character growth. In the books, the concept that love allows people to life for someone besides themselves, to be better than they were before because of it, exists in several examples. I think Draco could be a better person if he had a reason to, and part of that is learning to show mercy. Killing Harry was the nicest thing he could've done for him because, like Dumbledore, it allowed Harry to die on his own terms. Maybe not ideally, but not as a spectacle. True, the spectacle was still there, but Draco was in a way spared it because Harry was the spectacle and oh my Prongs, I've gone cross-eyed. I think you know what I mean.
Thank you, Crollicious, for reading and reviewing. It's darkety!dark fic, but really, it does give Draco a chance to do what Harry said he couldn't do, and that was to redeem himself in Harry's eyes, as well as his own.