Reviews For Uncovered by Death
Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 03/11/13 18:11
Chapter: Chapter 9 - Motive

I did a reread. I suppose I should have a clue who Cormac is hiding but no girl is coming up. Could it be Cormac is gay and doesn't want anyone to know.

Proudfoot is looking more and more at the very least unprofessional or worst guilty. I reread the search, and it definitily is as Scorpius said. Furthermore Proudfoot was extremely meticulous until they came into the bedroom. Also I noticed the Proudfoot was there before Scorpius presumably checking security.

I also noticed that Tamara implied that her apartment was muggle proof but later it says she doesn't know spells all that well because she's living a muggle life. I suspect her wand is closer to her than we think.

Good mystery.

Author's Response: Yes, Scorpius isn;t making anything up; Proudfoot is, as you say, at the very least unprofessional, and perhaps is guilty ... but of what? DUN DUN DUUUUUN.

I shall disabuse you of one thing; when I described Tamara's house as Muggle-proof, I did mean electric alarms, high walls, etc etc - like a gated community. Scorpius was able to Apparate there very easily because she has no wards set up against it.

There is a very weeeeeeny clue as to the identity of Cormac's lover, but it is very weeny.

Thank you very much for the review and I'm glad you're enjoying the story. I'm about to start chapter 12, which may give a few more answers to some of your questions (I just need to see how it pans out.) ~Carole~

Reviewer: silverlining95
Date: 03/10/13 9:59
Chapter: Chapter 9 - Motive

This is seriously intriguing me, I have no idea who it could be! I like how you haven't made Cormac a stereotypical villain, he's complex and I really want to know who it is that planted the wand! (I'm starting to think it might not be a 'her' though... hmmm)

I hope you update soon and that Scorpius finally gets to spend some time with Lily haha!


Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review :) - I am so pleased you're finding this intriguing as I've been trying to not reveal too much. It's very hard writing a mystery when you know the answer - hahahahah. I should be updating soon as have two chapters written, but I do need to get cracking on chapter 12. Thanks again ~Carole~

Reviewer: locanena
Date: 03/10/13 1:41
Chapter: Chapter 9 - Motive

Omg omg omg omg! Who is it?

Author's Response: Mwahahahahahahahahah - Not telling ... yet. (You might find out in chapter 12, as am about to start that one.)

Thank you ~Carole~

Reviewer: locanena
Date: 02/02/13 10:51
Chapter: Chapter 7 - Identification

You never have disappointed me, and you haven't still. Awesome chapter

Author's Response: Thank you so very much. I hpw you enjoy the next one. ~Carole

Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 01/31/13 22:18
Chapter: Chapter 7 - Identification

It's always neat to start a new chapter and remember the last bit of the previous chapter, if that makes sense. You left it at a cliffie with Tamara Flint so as I read those first few sentences, I got excited. And it was cool, esp. when Scorpius went to her house and discovered a cover-up. Or she was lying. I don't know. You've thrown out a ton of stuff here so rather than drive myself mad trying to figure it out, because I know I'll be wrong, I'm just noting them and enjoying the ride. Something's weird with McLaggen and his story about the train, something's weird with finding the wand, and something's odd about the wand itself (great research!) And then for Pat to get hit just as Harry was about to head to McLaggen's, forcing Proudfoot instead...yeah, I wasn't going to try to figure it out, so I'm stopping. With my suspicions. Sub plot could be anything with all that's going on, but yes, I am still totally enjoying it. Hope you are too. Great chapter - sorry for the really rambly review! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: hahahahaha - I'm a meany pants for not replying earlier, but thank you so much for the review. Hmm, there is a sub plot going on now because I liked the Tamara Flint dynamic and this was one of the reasons I had to pull it from the challenge because it was going to get far too long.

Thank you for all your reviews ~Carole~

Reviewer: ProfPosky
Date: 01/31/13 0:31
Chapter: Chapter 1 -Into the Trees

I have to agree that the wand may have been planted - and I suspect that auror, the nasty one, of having something to do with the murder or the murderer...

I find it interesting that people keep telling Scorpius he is the reason his mother dropped out - it seems to me that even a powerful wizard would have difficulty impregnating his mother before his own conception, but then, maybe these people know something I don't... silly me, if I were them, I'd more likely blame Astoria and Draco... but interesting how he is reacting to being connected to his mother, and then Ollivander brings it up at the end of the chapter - nice for someone besides Harry to finally have an "important" mother...

The whole pine wand business is very interesting. Did you make up pine being protective, or find it somewhere? Here a 'pine box" is (or was - my slang is behind the times) is slang for a coffin. hm...

Am now trying to picture using my double point sock knitting needles as wands, as they are about the same length. no - a pencil, I just measured. Will now go around practicing with a pencil for days, I suppose...

Waiting for next chapter!


Author's Response: I'm not sure Astoria is necessarily important in this story, it's more the way he's more like his mother (his core) than his father, despite people mixing them up because of the way he looks.

The pine wand business is from Pottermore. I was researching the wand woods and cores and pine fitted Sally-Ann's character to me, but there was this thing attached about longevity and protectiveness. However, that also suited, in my mind, the way the person died, so I decided she had a pine wand.

Interesting suspicions you have. Next chapter is written and beta'd, just waiting for me to edit and add (next week probably. I'm a little ahead of myself, but need to get back to this soon before I lose track of the story.

Thank you for reading and reviewing! ~Carole~

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 01/30/13 17:37
Chapter: Chapter 7 - Identification

It made me wonder if the wand was planted in Cormic's trunk. He seemed to have no problem with the aurors looking through his house. He can't be that stupid. Very complicated plot.

Author's Response: It's possible he's that stupid . . .

There's a few more twists, yet, but I hope it doesn't become too complicated. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. ~Carole~

Reviewer: locanena
Date: 01/21/13 21:31
Chapter: Chapter 6 - Blast from the Past

OH MY GOSH THIS IS SOO FREAKING AWESOME!! I love your style of writing!

Author's Response: Thank you so much. There should be another chapter coming up soon. :) ~Carole

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 01/17/13 17:13
Chapter: Chapter 6 - Blast from the Past

I love it! Can't wait.

Author's Response: Thank you. Next chapter should be up next week. ~Carole~

Reviewer: dmbw7052
Date: 01/15/13 18:52
Chapter: Chapter 6 - Blast from the Past

really good! but what does higgledy-piggledy mean?

Author's Response: higgledy- piggledy means a mess, so everything is mixed up. Thanks for the review ~Carole~

Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 01/15/13 17:22
Chapter: Chapter 6 - Blast from the Past

Nice cliffhanger, for one! And loved seeing Draco, for another. Bringing him in as a consult was a good idea for the interpersonal relationships going on here. ;) But my favorite part had to be this:

“Are you asking me out?” Scorpius said, laughing loudly. “Only I’m seeing your sister, and you’re really not my type.”

HAHAHA I loved that! Were you cackling when you wrote that too?

Great job with McLaggen and the clues from the body advancing the plot, and then the cursed diary (nice to see Harry can still be impulsive and stupid, lol) and again - great cliffie!

So much fun to read!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: I did cackle at that bit (and there's something in a later chapter that makes me giggle, too) but I think I hugged myslef more at bringing Draco in. Mwahahahahah - *sigh* I can't seem to stop writing him, atm.
,br> Glad you liked the cliff. Mmm, Harry is still going to be reckless at times, and although he's a 'grown-up' I can imagine him still getting wound up by Draco when Draco is being clever about something. Not as petty as Draco, but still getting irritated with him.

Thank you. ~Carole~

Reviewer: ProfPosky
Date: 01/15/13 14:59
Chapter: Chapter 1 -Into the Trees

I especially like the Draco vs. Harry by-play. And I would write more, but I am on my Nook and the touch screen is very,very annoying.
Note to self, do NOT get Iphone...

Author's Response: I have an iPhone . . . I am pleased you liked Draco. When I had the idea about including him, I was hugging myself with girlish glee because I do so like writing his snark and also the dynamic between him and Harry. At times they're still the schoolboys they were and can never quite leave the past behind. Thanks for the review ~Carole~

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 01/15/13 13:16
Chapter: Chapter 6 - Blast from the Past

Another twist, but it makes for a great story.

Author's Response: Thank you. Yes, this is the point where plot lines start to diverge :) Thank you for the review and I'm glad you're enjoying the story. ~Carole~

Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 01/02/13 22:40
Chapter: Chapter 5 - Threads

The chapter title says it all: so many threads here! I loved the locket, and meeting Pomona in a Muggle garden, and finding that diary with Susan Bones. And then introducing new suspects like Cormac - the plot thickens! Great stuff. Love the dynamic between Harry and Scorpius - Harry so calm and understanding, Scorpius eager to learn and help. Oh, and throwing in that last bit about Proudfoot - great details! Loving it! Such fun to read - keep it coming! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: There are a lot of threads in this tale and hopefully they won't all get tangled - ha. Thank you, Gina for the review. I will keep going because I'm really enjoying writing it. ~Carole~

Reviewer: Softy
Date: 01/01/13 21:07
Chapter: Chapter 5 - Threads

So many twists and turns, I can't wait for the next installment. I wanted to see lily and Scorpius continue their relationship but now I am far more intrigued by the mystery of the body. Great story please don't make me wait too long for what happens next

Author's Response: Thank you so much for saying this. When I conceived the idea of this story, I was concerned about the fact that I'd billed it as a follow up to High, and yet the romance aspect does take a back seat. There will be more Scorpius/Lily moments, but with her at Hogwarts and him working, I realised their time together had to be limited. Thanks again. ~Carole~

Reviewer: ProfPosky
Date: 12/30/12 13:24
Chapter: Chapter 1 -Into the Trees

That review seems to have submitted itself by accident before was finished, so you get two for one here... ;-)

I really don't know who did it, which impresses me. Could be Cormac, he's such an idiot, could have done it by accident - but that's so obvious. I'm sort of hoping Draco is at least under suspicion for a bit... not that I think he did it, but it would be so delightful to have poor Scorpius pulled in so many directions, and while I do believe he would do the right thing in the long run, I can see you doing so much with the suspense...

BTW, her robes probably have a fair percentage of something like polyester, which works perfectly with her being on the assisted students scholarship...(I got the suggestion that they were probably synthetic at least in part from my expert..)

Author's Response: It could be Cormac, the idiot, or it could be Draco, or maybe it's ... No, I can't say. No hints at all. She certainly wore cheap robes and nothing bespoke. That does fit with Sally-Ann's profile, but it's not been confirmed yet. ;p ~Carole~

Reviewer: ProfPosky
Date: 12/30/12 13:13
Chapter: Chapter 5 - Threads

How will they read it? Someone will find a way... One of the girls, I'll bet - Ginny, or Hermione, or maybe even Lily, although of course none of them should be touching it, or maybe Scorpius will show his mettle...

Author's Response: Ah, well, the diary reader might be revealed in the next chapter ... and ... um ... no, I'll let you find out. I'm not sure Ginny would want to go near one again, mind you. Thank you ~Carole~

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 12/30/12 7:27
Chapter: Chapter 5 - Threads

With any luck, they will read it in the next chapter. This is a cracking story.

Author's Response: Thank you very much and I'm glad you're enjoying the story. The diary might take a little longer to decipher than the next chapter . . . ~Carole~

Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 12/27/12 15:17
Chapter: Chapter 4 - Complications

Nice twist/connection with Hannah! I hope you don't make her a suspect, though. Poor Scorpius and Lily keep getting interrupted, lol. Where's all the stuff I saw on LS?? ;) very good chapter because I loved seeing the supporting cast and what they are up to. And that reveal at the end is brilliant. Yes, I looked her up. Very cool and can't wait to see where it goes! ~Gina :)
PS I will catch up with your other soon too!

Author's Response: Ah, the stuff on the LS ... later chapter ... possibly. Bit of a running joke, poor old Scorpy getting increasingly frustrated - heh heh - that's long distance relationships for you.

Hannah as a suspect ..... hmmmmmmmmm, we shall see. Glad you looked up Sally-Ann - yes, she's definitely there, and yet not when they take OWLS so of course there has to be a reason .. .

Thank you for reviewing. I've just sent ch 11 to the evil Kara for beta'ing, so let's see what she thinks - mwahahahahahahahha ~Carole~

Reviewer: ProfPosky
Date: 12/23/12 0:14
Chapter: Chapter 4 - Complications

I feel dreadful because I didn’t really like her much, and all I wanted was my necklace, but if that body is her, then -” She gulped and her face drained of all colour. “Merlin, this is worse than I thought. All those years of thinking badly of her ... it was my grandmother’s necklace, you see, and ... and ... and she couldn’t have returned the necklace to me, anyway - not if she was dead. Neville, what am I -”

This is so finely handled! Very in-character, very human. What a shock it must have been for her to see it in the paper!

I like the party scene as well - very true to life. Although I think you and I must agree to disagree about Oliver, because in another universe he and I are married and ...I shall be tactful and just smirk... :-)

That's the beauty of the characters who are less fleshed out, isn't it? There's so much more you can do with them, or rather, so much more that needs doing with them.

Lovely, as usual!

Author's Response: Oh, we can agree about Oliver. He says in another fic I wrote, that he's 'discerning', that leaves the field wide open :D .

Yes, the beauty of minor characters, especially more or less non existent ones like Scorpiuswho I have so much fun writing.

Thea, thank you very much for your review and support. I'm glad you appreciated Hannah's 'human' reaction. I think she's feeling a lot of guilt now for feeling badly towards the girl, but nothing is certain ... yet (although I might have just left you another red herring - heh heh heh) ~Carole~

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