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Name: The_Real_Hermione (Signed) · Date: 11/22/12 5:42 · For: The One and Only Chapter
I think this is a really interesting and different story. I liked the way you set up the friendship between Harry and Hermione, especially the line She had never abandoned Harry before and she wasn’t very well going to start now - that reminded me of the end of HBP, which I thought was really appropriate given the situation.

It was an intriguing choice that Harry wanted to talk to Salazar... to me it made sense that he went back to the beginnings of Hogwarts, because the school always had so much meaning to him, but I wasn't quite sure why he spoke to Salazar. I understand that you refer to it being about what makes a good person etc, but it would have been nice if the story was expanded a bit more. I know the story is more about Hermione and how she relates to Harry, but I would have liked to have seen a bit more of Harry and what went on with Salazar... to me Hermione's final line "I'm glad you found yourself" doesn't quite make sense, because even though Harry doesn't seem depressed anymore, there's not that much evidence that something has really changed for him.

I also think it would have been good if you'd expanded a bit on Harry's fits of depression... you refer to them not having interfered with his work, but I think it would add to the story to know a bit more.

Having said that, I found it an enjoyable story to read, and I thought Hermione's character was done excellently, and you really showed her point of view and thoughts.


Author's Response: I really would have liked to expand more on this, too, I've had a lot of ideas about why Harry would go back to when Hogwarts was founded. But, as this was a challenge entry and there was a deadline (which I just about managed to keep), there wasn't much time for me to delve deeper... Anyway, what I mean is that I agree with you :) A bit more substance wouldn't have hurt. I'm glad you liked the characterization and that you took the time to read and review! Thank you :)

Name: Oregonian (Signed) · Date: 11/22/12 0:25 · For: The One and Only Chapter
This story is nicely written and fun to read. An interesting moment in time to focus on.

Author's Response: Thank you for saying so! I was a bit worried this wouldn't be interesting at all, since I've never written anything near a Historical fic before. I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

Name: Nagini Riddle (Signed) · Date: 11/21/12 13:08 · For: The One and Only Chapter
Yay! Another gauntlet entry! :)I really enjoyed reading this and picking out the prompts. Good job! Nice way to incorporate what was given you, and I got to see Harry in a new light. Good luck! ~Nagini, a fellow challenger

P.S. Check out my gauntlet story- The Ghosts That Follow!!! :)

Author's Response: Thank you! I wasn't expecting all prompts to be pictures, so I was quite thrown by that :p Good luck to you, too!!

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