Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 05/29/14 14:45
Chapter: Master of the Inner Eye

I loved this story. I totally did not expect the ending. Was this the night that Lily died? I just got a shiver. Very good job.

Author's Response: Yes, it was the night Lily and James died. I just got a shiver, too - eeek. Thank you ~Carole~

Reviewer: Padfoot11333
Date: 12/08/12 10:19
Chapter: Master of the Inner Eye

Carole, I’ve realised that you’ve written over a hundred stories, and I haven’t SPEW reviewed any of them. I think this needs to be rectified, so here goes. I haven’t read anything on Tiresias--or any of the Trelawneys excluding Sybil, really. I was intrigued by the summary, and despite the fact that it’s not quite Halloween anymore, I decided to read.

Mundungus, I think, is a very good character to put in a story all about scams. I’ve never really thought that he and the Trelawneys (because Tiresias does take after Sybil) would tie together, but now that I do, it works incredibly well. And I did like how Tiresias and Sybil are alike in that they both don’t really have the skills that they claim to, but they end up with those skills without meaning to. And I also enjoyed how Tiresias is actually jealous of Sybil, for landing a decent job while he’s still doing sideshow tricks for Muggles. I felt like Tiresias was just being dragged on a bit by Mundungus, since the latter isn’t as good in front of a crowd, and it felt very realistic to wish that he had the life his sister did.

I liked the way that Tiresias led on the woman to believe that he knew things and could communicate with the dead. Of course it would be much easier for wizards to discover information, but the way it was presented in the story--from the biscuit tin to the nicknames--seemed very impressive even to me. If I did have a quibble, it would be to know a bit more as to how they came across this information, but as I’ve said, I think it worked very well the way it is and it’s only my inability to not know something that’s bothering me.

Oh, and the ending was wonderful. I’d been reading through this thinking it would be almost a spoof of a spooky story, and then I got to the last few paragraphs. It took me a few read throughs to really catch what was happening, but once I did, I was both shocked and sad that there wasn’t anything else there.

This is a horrible review, and I apologise profusely, but I really did enjoy the story quite a bit. Good job. :)

Lily

Author's Response: OOH, thank you Lily.

Right, I shall deal with the query. They didn't actually find out about the biscuit tin. All Mundungus had done was trawled through death notices and found out who'd died recently. He had a list of Edwards, so there was a high chance one of those people would be at the event. From then on Tiresias was fishing. Psychics are very clever people (I don't believe in them so am very cynical), and he used a few pieces of information that are generic - everyone has a biscuit tin, for instance - and then when she agreed, he elaborated. Also, certain people of a certain age (at that time) were quite likely to keep something in a biscuit tin - money etc. Tiresias has no idea if he's right, but by then he and Mundungus will have moved to the next town. Tiresias is very manipulative. He sees the woman wears a ring and has recently lost weight - therefore, she's probably a widow.

The lines about being remembered like a book are taken from an actual psychic who someone I know visited. Whilst the woman gave her a great deal of comfort, I still think psychics are fakes. - ha!

Tiresias, btw, I made up, and have no idea if Sybil had a brother. The name comes from a Greek Seer, like Sybil and also Cassandra. I figured that Sybil was a fake and so was her brother, but they are incredibly good at reading people.

Thank you very much for the review and I'm glad you enjoyed the story.

~Carole~

Reviewer: Trucker
Date: 10/31/12 20:59
Chapter: Master of the Inner Eye

Great ending! I never saw that one coming.

Author's Response: Just like Tiresias, then. :D. Thank you for the review. ~Carole~

Reviewer: Ruchira_M
Date: 10/31/12 10:44
Chapter: Master of the Inner Eye

Tiresias? He could pretend to be blind, you know, for effects. Surprise ending.

Author's Response: Tarnation! I missed a trick. Perhaps he'll go blind now after getting his first ever real vision. Thanks for the review/ ~Carole~

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 10/31/12 7:07
Chapter: Master of the Inner Eye

I certainly was not expecting the last paragraph.

Author's Response: Mwahahahahahahahahahahah - Yeah, I don't think Tiresias was, either. Thanks for the review ~Carole~

Reviewer: hestiajones
Date: 10/31/12 4:41
Chapter: Master of the Inner Eye

I went from :D to :( Happy Halloween to you too, and thanks for this lovely present :D (Yes, I am going to claim it as mine.)

Author's Response: Yes, it is a bit of a turnaround, but I couldn't find the 'conflicting emotions' or 'sting in the tail/tale' warning - heh heh.

Thank you for reviewing, and as you're the first then you may claim it - you ho!

~Croll~

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