Reviewer: Stargirl34
Date: 01/19/13 12:45
Chapter: Chapter 11 Epilogue

I loved this. The whole story was so real: Harry's misgivings about starting his family, his realization that his past was abusive, his search for links to his past... And your epilogue was perfect. I love the idea of Harry reading the books to his own children. Well done!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for saying that the story was well done. I had no idea, when I started, whether I could write something worth reading or not. There is not much magic in this story; maybe that it why it seems real -- because it is something that could happen to anyone. The Bible says, "The truth will set you free," and in Harry's case, it did.

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 01/14/13 15:00
Chapter: Chapter 10 The Last Funeral

Sorry I haven't made previous reviews. I liked this story. Mr. Weasley's interpretation of Harry's dream was excellant. Good writing.

Author's Response: Thank you very much for writing a review now. Mr Weasley is an entertaining character, but also very wise, and it is good that Harry can rely on him. I am glad that you enjoyed my story.

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 01/14/13 14:25
Chapter: Chapter 10 The Last Funeral

This story has always been been about a different subject to the usual. It has been a journey for Harry and us readers and I really like the ending.

Author's Response: Interesting that you say that the story has been a journey for the readers as well as for Harry. Perhaps many people take this journey. Thank you for your continued interest. There will be one more chapter.

Reviewer: baby54boomer
Date: 01/14/13 13:51
Chapter: Chapter 10 The Last Funeral


Author's Response: Thank you for that kind word. You know, I think that this story appeals more to the older readers because we are able to look back over the sweep of our lives and our children's lives and recognize the enduring themes.

Reviewer: nevilleherosnape
Date: 01/13/13 18:22
Chapter: Chapter 10 The Last Funeral

I cried right along with him!!! Very well written!

Author's Response: Thank you for your appreciation. This chapter was the most difficult to write, and I struggled with it longer than with the other chapters. I wish that all of us (including me) could be as brave and tough as Harry.

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 12/22/12 14:16
Chapter: Chapter 9 The Bombing of Coventry

While child abuse is a serious subject, This is a very gentle story and Harry meets some nice people.

Author's Response: Thank you very much for continuing to read. I like to think that it is a story of hope, of coming out of the dark shadows into the daylight.

Reviewer: ProfPosky
Date: 12/12/12 12:06
Chapter: Chapter 2 The Sign in the Plaza

I have always thought that the books make too little of Harry's background. I'm not certain the last paragraph here doesn't make too much of it - except for how you have placed it at a time in his life when a person might well worry about such things.

"Only Hermione, the Weasleys, and a few others knew him also as the Survivor of Sixteen Years in the Dursley Household."

And I do hope he does talk to one of them...

Author's Response: I am hoping that when you read the subsequent chapters you will see why I made that statement. Despite what I wrote in response to an earlier review, this story is not really my first work of fiction; except for the characters and locales created by JKR, it is all taken from real life. The book Harry finds in Chapter 6 really exists as depicted and would affect any survivor of childhood abuse in the way it affected him. Patricia's statements in Chapter 7, that it takes time to rebuild a healthy personality from a foundation of abuse, that she is still working on it at age 48, and that "it will always be a part of the definition of who you are", are accurate. People who were blessed enough to avoid being part of a Dursley-like household may feel that some of this story is over the top, but people who lived through that experience will identify with it. Thank you very much for reading and commenting on my story, and I hope you will also enjoy the coming chapters.

Reviewer: ProfPosky
Date: 12/12/12 12:00
Chapter: Chapter 1 Infanticide

Oh, how stark! And very well done - I can picture it all. I'm rushing on to the next chapter..

Author's Response: Yes, "stark" is a good word to describe many of Harry's experiences.

Reviewer: dreamsnape
Date: 12/10/12 3:23
Chapter: Chapter 7 St. Stephen's Church

Good story. I liked how it explored some of Harry's deepest fears, and addressed the subject of how the years of neglect with the Dursleys had affected him. It was very believable.

Author's Response: Thank you for reading my story. You will recall chapter 3 in Book 6, where Dumbledore says to the Dursleys, "You have never treated Harry as a son. He has known nothing but neglect and often cruelty at your hands. The best that can be said is that he has escaped the appalling damage you have inflicted upon the unfortunate boy sitting between you." It struck me that Dumbledore could see the obvious damage (obesity, bullying, self-centeredness) that Dudley exhibited, but he seems not to have been aware of the damage (of a different sort) that had been done to Harry also but which was less obvious to the casual glance. Wise as he was, Dumbledore apparently didn't know everything.

Reviewer: cjbaggins
Date: 12/04/12 0:40
Chapter: Chapter 7 St. Stephen's Church

Love the idea that his mother's love may have protected him from the Dursley's too. Nice touch. cj

Author's Response: I am glad that you are continuing to like my story. As you can tell, it is important to me and I felt that it needed to be written.

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 12/03/12 5:24
Chapter: Chapter 7 St. Stephen's Church

I think the last line is very likely.

Author's Response: Thank you for continuing to read my story.

Reviewer: nevilleherosnape
Date: 12/02/12 17:53
Chapter: Chapter 7 St. Stephen's Church

This I love! It very literally spoke to me!! Thank you!!

Author's Response: I am so glad that you liked it. I think it is the sort of subject that a reader will either like a lot or not at all. In this story Harry is braver than a lot of us would be, but that is his nature. It is so much easier to run away from our problems than to face them.

Reviewer: cjbaggins
Date: 11/19/12 0:20
Chapter: Chapter 5 Volunteer Night

Love that Harry is getting information that may be useful to him to help him move beyond his past.

Off to add this story to favourites so I will get notifications of updates ...


Author's Response: He's just getting started...

Reviewer: cjbaggins
Date: 11/17/12 0:03
Chapter: Chapter 3: The American Visitor

Loved Pamela's comment, that Harry repeats to himself, "It is safe to talk ...".


Author's Response: Thanks, and I loved that Harry had the guts to actually act on it.

Reviewer: DaisyMaeEvans
Date: 11/12/12 13:44
Chapter: Chapter 3: The American Visitor

THis one is really fascinating. I look forward to the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thank you for your kind words. It has been fun writing it, but certainly a lot of work.

Reviewer: DaisyMaeEvans
Date: 11/12/12 13:44
Chapter: Chapter 3: The American Visitor

THis one is really fascinating. I look forward to the next chapter!

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 11/12/12 10:43
Chapter: Chapter 3: The American Visitor


Author's Response: I hope it will continue to be interesting for you.

Reviewer: cjbaggins
Date: 11/11/12 10:06
Chapter: Chapter 1 Infanticide

After having spent many hours here at Mugglenet fanfic perusing the many offerings, I thought I had had my fill of others' stories. I was pleasantly surprised, therefore, to find this one. It is an interesting premise, and as another reviewer has mentioned, very plausible in light of Harry's experiences as a child.

One tiny nit - as a baby does not take his or her first breath until *after* the sac of waters has broken, Harry's infant would not, in fact, have drowned, as its respiratory system would not have switched over yet, and would remain safely "breathing" amniotic fluid until the sac burst. However, I understand that it was Harry's dream, and he may be ignorant of such things. Besides, I realize that it is his fear that is important here, not the actual medical details

Off to read the next chapter ...


Author's Response: Thank you for reading my story.

Reviewer: Snorkack
Date: 11/07/12 13:50
Chapter: Chapter 2 The Sign in the Plaza

Interesting subject. Is this really your first story? If it is, congratulations, it's interesting and easy to read and I'm looking forward to the rest of it - hopefully we won't have to wait too long!

Author's Response: It's my first attempt at writing fiction, and I'm finding it quite different from non-fiction or historical drama. I'm thankful to have found this site, which gives so much help from beta readers, moderators, and the reading public, not to mention the tutorial materials. Thanks for saying it's easy to read; I don't think I could write in a more convoluted style, but it is fascinating to see the many different styles that the authors have, and to try to learn from them.

Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 11/04/12 15:14
Chapter: Chapter 1 Infanticide

OOOH! Thank you. I say thank you because I've been trying to find a new story to read that I could a) like and b) connect to, and I think I've just found it.

The premise here with Harry being scared of fatherhood is so very plausible. He doesn't really have the greatest early role models around him, after all, despite seeing Arthur and Molly later. The first dream was disturbing (ish), but i could well understand why he had it because he used to be shut up below the stairs so his upbringing must be coming back to him. I want to grab hold of him and tell him that some of this is normal. (I have kids, and I can tell you I've dreamt I've left them somewhere, or forgotten I had them etc etc - wonder what that says about me - lol)

Your story suggests that he's going to find something deeper than worry over being a new dad, and certainly the persistence of the dreams is more worrying (plus he's not awash with hormones like Ginny).

Well done. i look forward to reading more.


Author's Response: I'm glad you like this offbeat story. The first dream is one that I had long before Harry Potter was ever written, and I didn't connect it with his own experience until after I'd started writing the story (if you can believe that!). All the dreams are collected from me and my friends and adapted for the purpose of the story. There was a cyber-glitch that caused my first chapter to break into two parts when I submitted it, so I have renamed those two halves as Chapter One and Chapter Two and have retitled them, as you will notice. This is my first story, which I wrote after reading and enjoying many other stories. It seemed that it needed to be written.

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