Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 10/22/12 21:03
Chapter: The Foulest Creature

Nice imagery! You've definitely captured the essence of a dementor. I'm curious about the short lines: did you cut them at certain points for rhythm or effect? The short lines affect the feeling, I think. Longer lines would read differently. So I'm just curious how you went about it, since the vast majority of my poems tend to be dictated by rhymes. Nice job! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: I tend to cut for effect, though sometimes doing so creates rhythm. :) Thank you for your lovely review. It made me very happy and really helped to have my day end on a high note. :)

Reviewer: alex13
Date: 10/19/12 12:13
Chapter: The Foulest Creature

This describes the demontors so well!! All I can say is that this is a great poem!! You are so very talented! :)

Author's Response: Alex, I cannot begin to express how ecstatic I am that you have stuck with me through every poem and story! Thank you so much!!!!!!!!!! :)

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