Aw this was really cute!
Very cute story! I thought both of them were well within character. The Weasleys were well written and that is rather how I would expect them to react to Harry and Ginny. I liked how Ron leaves first so he can pretend that Ginny leaves as well :).
I loved how Harry knew Ginny so well that he could tell when there was more to the story.
Very sweet little story!
Absolutely love this story, and have read it several times now. Love how tender the relationship is between Harry and Ginny, but still keeps with the banter in the books (and sadly absent in the movies).
I hope you continue writing more one shots from this universe, it's a lovely place to visit.
Author's Response: Thank you so much; Its great to hear you can read it more than once and still enjoy it. I definitely have plans to revisit this little universe, and write more Potter fiction in general, though there's no telling when I'll find the time at the minute. But yes, there's definitely more one shots I can think of for them.
I read this story a few days ago and I still can not get over how flawless it is. You are such a wonderful author and I hope that you decide to write more.
Author's Response: Wow, thank you! I can always find flaws with my own writing, but it means a lot that you don't see them (think I've said that right XD). I really appreciate the compliment. I am definitely planning to write more - not for this story, but some other one shots, some in this 'universe' - I've just not had much time for writing at all recently. Hopefully there will be more posted in the near future. Thanks again :)
Luvd it sooo awesome can u write more
Author's Response: Thank you :) I'm glad you enjoyed it. There's no more to this story, but I am considering more one shots in this 'universe' and am currently working on a completely separate short fic which I hope to be up in the next couple of months.
As a person who’s fond of anything Harry/Ginny, this fic was a really pleasant way to start my day. It was fabulously written, and you managed to keep me on tenterhooks all along. Your story flowed together really well and the grammar and your vocabulary are impeccable. Not once did I feel put off from reading this. The tone was so natural that I didn’t even realize when it ended. It was a fantastic read.
You’ve managed to characterize Harry and Ginny perfectly, and that is something many authors struggle to do. I especially adored Harry’s awkwardness with hugging Hermione and Mrs Weasley - that sounds very Harry-like, for I never saw him as an overly emotional person to begin with. Ginny’s snarky attitude with Romilda cracked me up, and I can see her as the same Ginny who spread the word about Harry’s tattoo. Their relationship, too, was believable and extremely adorable, for it was a delicate balance of love and trust. Harry, we know, really loved Ginny from the beginning (him staring into the Marauder’s map looking at her dot). From your characterisation and scenes, especially the part where he can feel her presence and the way he draws her close to him, I feel that this is the way JK Rowling herself would intend it to be. I actually aww-ed at the line: “As they had grown up, and grown closer, so had the touches.”, for you managed to make it sound so intimate and endearing and just so Harry/Ginny.
The Weasleys, too, were spot on. Mrs Weasley was perfect, what with her fuss over Ginny’s sleeping plans and the phrase: “will be glued to chairs with wedding plans by Mum” was completely accurate. All of them and even the descriptions of Bill and Mr Weasley ring as true. …the twins were much lighter about the whole thing and Harry joked with them about it freely). This confuses me slightly, though; what can Harry joke with them about? If it’s the sleeping arrangements, then I have to say I disagree, for no matter how much Fred and George were okay with Harry, I really don’t think that they would take it lightly if Harry mentioned that they were sleeping together. Other than that little thing, though, it’s perfectly and brilliantly characterised.
The way you gradually added descriptions and their backgrounds and careers instead of overloading it all at once worked well for me . It wasn’t dredging at all, and it only came up when I felt that some sort of additional information was needed. And speaking of that, it was a nice idea for Ron to be the head of tactics and strategy -- and I actually have a snarky feeling that he sometimes takes help from Hermione in such matters, hehe ;-). Seeing your authors’ notes, though, I had been wondering where the AU and the Epilogue? What Epilogue warnings are going to creep up, but other that Fred being alive (and I liked that, because I couldn't accept his death either) I didn’t find any hints of those warnings. Their characters didn’t really deviate from canon anyway, so I feel it’s not really necessary to add the EWE warning :).
You kept me on the edge of my seat as I wondered what on earth Ginny had done that made her so nervous about telling Harry. As I kept on reading, the suspense grew up and I ended up saying “come on!” out loud, and that actually made my mum, who was in my room, look at me questioningly. And then finally, when I read It was crunch time. I squeed. It was a very impactful sentence, for it prepares the reader for what was coming. While I do understand why Ginny was so embarrassed by it, I found it very hilarious, and I’m so glad Harry actually asked her to marry him in the end. The proposal was so sweet and delicate, and from the lines Harry was watching her steadily, eyes bright and filled with a tenderness that ran bone deep. "Marry me?" The question mark at the end was only just discernible. It was more of a demand than a question. He had no reason to doubt her, not now. you showed exactly how strong their love for each other was. This and the comical twist at the end bring to life the dynamics of their relationship, making them an all-rounded couple.
I’ll finish off with saying that this was a spectacular read, and that I certainly hope to see more from you in the future.
Author's Response: First, thank you for taking the time to write such an amazing, well rounded review. I've never received one anything like this before and it really means a lot. I am thrilled to know this started off the day well for you, and that you felt I got the characters right and wrote them naturally, since I'm never certain (being my own worst critic). As for grammar/punctuation - that is one of my pet peeves in fiction, so I can get very finicky about it. And I do enjoy using some strange words where mundane ones work just as well :). I definitely wanted to hold onto Ginny's snarky sense of humour and her notorious temper and I've always read Harry as being slightly uncomfortable with the amount of physical affection he gets from Mrs Weasley and Hermione. I always thought it would be different with Ginny, though, and needing that physical contact so subconsciously would be a bit of a throwback from life with the Dursleys. In short, I'm relieved and elated you thought I kept them the people they were intended to be. The Weasleys are fun for me to write, because I can imagine them in a few ways - this interpretation just worked for this story. Sometimes I think her parents would be all too understanding, and sometimes I think Molly would go off the deep end (only about the living situation - she'd be thrilled to plan a wedding in any life). In this instance, the gruding acceptance that Ginny was of age and made her own choices fitted. As for the twins...I tend to disagree. Both of them are rarely serious, and only then for short bursts. If George can get his ear sliced clean off and be joking less than an hour later, I don't think even Ginny's living situation would be something they took too hard. I think it's hinted that they especially know how independent she is and given she's older, I think looking at the entire thing as a bit of a joke would be how they dealt with it (Plus, they like Harry rather more than Michael or Dean). That said, Harry's not the type to joke about a sexual relationship, so that would be a more generalised thing to do with Ginny always being at the cottage, even overnight, but without giving the twins useful blackmail material. As for the EWE warning - I basically wanted to cover my bases. Extra interviews have told us a fair bit about their lives in the 19 years after the battle, and I didn't stick to it strictly - Hermione starts her Law career early, Ron's not needed to help George at the WWW etc. As the focus was on Harry and Ginny, the mentions are subtle and the warning may not have been necessary, but I didn't want another canon nut like me to stumble across something I'd changed if they weren't expecting it. Fred I just can't seem to keep dead, and that alone would change the Epilogue, so that's just me being over precautious for my first time posting on this site :). Lastly, I've had my fair share of exclamations at a computer screen when I read something that keeps me in suspense or makes me do a double take, so its great to hear my story had you in the same position (though maybe I should apologise, too XD). I had a lot of fun writing the twist around at the end. I've read one too many stories about all the pre-proposal nerves and the huge romantic gestures, but they just nag at me a bit because (to me, who's not into marriage) if you're so nervous about asking, maybe you shouldn't be? I'm glad my proposal-that-wasn't-a-question conveyed their surety in their relationship so well. Again, thank you for the amazing review and feedback. I do hope to write more in this altered future soon and I hope you enjoy that, when it finally gets posted. I'm working on a rather more AU short fic, but due to Mugglenet's restrictions with AU, it may not be posted here. I'll see how that goes. Either way, there's definitely more Harry and Ginny from me in the future :). -Tatty
I think this is a really nice piece. I'm not 100% sure that the canon non-compliance was totally necessary, but you're right in that it didn't distract that much. I have to applaud you on your Harry and Ginny characterizations, they're great! Really genuine and I think you nailed their dynamic. Well done, I'm eager for more!
Author's Response: Thank you for the feedback! I agree, I didn't need to deviate from canon, but I can never seem to write Fred dead, no matter how little it affects the plot and half of this was written on autopilot so I didn't realise I'd done it again until I finished. That aside, I'm glad you enjoyed it and I'm thrilled you think I got the characterizations down so well. I am hoping to write more in this version of their future, but I'm currently working on something that is more than a touch AU, so it may not be posted here. Its great to know you want to read more, though, and there will be some up at some point :) Thanks again.
I'm not usually a fan of anything that defies canon, however with this I'd have to make an exception.
I loved how much detail you went into with Ginny's life, without it feeling too exposition-y and overloading the reader. She was the Ginny we know from the books yet you still made her your own, and it really worked.
The relationship between Harry and Ginny was really intricately woven together, and entirely believable and human. I really felt you made their relationship come alive with the dynamic you gave them.
I thought Ginny's characterisation was interesting, particularly her attitude towards her family. The allusions to her and Harry's intimate relationship were cleverly done, and I liked the fact Ginny seemed to want to keep her family guessing as to how committed they were as a couple.
The only criticism I really have is that personally I felt it unnecessary to stray from canon as it didn't really effect the plot? I guess what I'm trying to say is that I could understand diverging from canon for artistic purposes and all that but I think making this canon wouldn't have negatively effected the story at all, and if I'm honest I can't quite see why you didn't. But that's just my opinion :)
Overall I really enjoyed it, it was well written and I felt you captured their relationship perfectly.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your thoughtful feedback! I am really glad you enjoyed it and thought I managed to bring a level of reality and believability into the characters and their relationship. As I've not written Harry and Ginny before, its very encouraging to know I didn't wreck them on my first attempt :). I understand what you said about the deviation from canon, too. Honestly, I agree; Fred's survival in no way affected the immediate plot and it would have worked just the same, par a few sentences, had I stuck completely to the books. The truth is that I always hate accepting Fred's death, even in the most vague stories and I wrote him to still be alive basically on autopilot and only realised when I'd finished that I had. In my mind, when I write potter fics, his death never happened, so I left it the way I'd first written it, even though I knew it might
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your thoughtful feedback! I am really glad you enjoyed it and thought I managed to bring a level of reality and believability into the characters and their relationship. As I've not written Harry and Ginny before, its very encouraging to know I didn't wreck them on my first attempt :). I understand what you said about the deviation from canon, too. Honestly, I agree; Fred's survival in no way affected the immediate plot and it would have worked just the same, par a few sentences, had I stuck completely to the books. The truth is that I always hate accepting Fred's death, even in the most vague stories and I wrote him to still be alive basically on autopilot and only realised when I'd finished that I had. In my mind, when I write potter fics, his death never happened, so I left it the way I'd first written it, even though I knew it might seem like a useless point to some people. Thanks again (and I'm sorry if this appears twice, since I have a feeling my laptop hiccuped...) Tatty