After my first reading, I was genuinely speechless. This poem fills me with awe.

This poem is definitely a prayer. The phrases at the beginning of each stanza make the song feel like a hymn. It certainly conveys Harry’s reverence of death (I assume that is the master, although Harry is master of death…) and each stanza gives a new plea of peace and calm.

I don’t fully understand your repetition of ‘emerald’, but I love it. I did wonder if it was to do with Harry’s eyes, but I think it’s probably more to do with the Avada Kedavra. Each different manifestation of emerald is a different side of death, and you show this so beautifully.

I think this poem not only lets us see a reverence of death, but also a fear. I know that Harry is not supposed to fear death, but this poem does not really specify a character (I took it to be Harry from your summary). If I use Harry/Lily’s eyes as the emerald, this poem can just as easily apply to Snape (except maybe a few lines) and how he longs for peace from his own mind in death.

I cannot think of a melody at present, but I cannot help but think what a beautiful peaceful requiem this would make. Needless to say, I love it.